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SnoozySloth
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2018-12-21 02:10

Note: I give 5/5 stars regardless of my scoring below. Also, the story only has 4 chapters at the time of this review, so it's really too early to properly judge it. Keep in mind the score could change a lot (for better or worse) as more chapters are added. Writing Quality: 3.5/5. It's clear the author speaks English, but I'm guessing it's their 2nd language. It's good enough that readers should have no problem understanding what's happening. It's just that some sentences read a bit oddly and minor grammar mistakes are common. Updates: 2/5. Looks like two updates per month so far. Story: 4/5. Original story that's fairly interesting. It has a lot of potential depending on how things play out. Minus one point because the MC (Shorty) is just kind of going with the flow for now. But really, it's too early to judge accurately. This could easily be bumped up to 5/5 after a few more chapters. Character Design. 4/5. The characters are interesting and engaging. Their appearances could be described in more detail. World Background. 5/5. It's clear the author has put a lot of effort planning the world/universe before writing, and that effort shows very early on in the work.

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Theodoric
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I respect this review very much. It's really accurate and it's by the author that inspired me to start writing. Now about this world. It exists in my mind for more than ten yrs now. It's really worked out and detailed. I've been writing drafts bout it for about six yrs. Anyway, I'm writing this part-time. And I'm most of the time not able to write bcs of the private reasons. I've been trying to update one chap per day now, but it's not going to last for long tho. I'm still in highschool so I need to study a lot and I plan a uni later on. However, this novel and the book I plan later on are the most precious things in my life, so every review or comment like this means a lot. Peace to y'all, brothers.

SnoozySloth
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Good luck! It can be hard to write a chapter a day for sure. I still struggle doing it even after writing for several months, lol. Your writing quality will also likely improve with time and effort. My first attempt at writing was pretty bad. Also, Try not to let writing interfere with your grades =p. On a more personal note (This is based on my assumptions, so take this advice with a grain of salt and seek other peoples opinions. Ultimately, you know yourself and what you want better than anyone else.) be careful what you choose to go to university for. I loved programming and technology, so I went to college for it and it killed my passion for it. School has a way of making the funnest things the most miserable. Lol. So I'm kind of glad I didn't go to school for English/Writing, as I imagine it would have likely had the same effect, though I'm sure it also would have improved my writing ability. Also, don't know about your country, but here, it's hard to find a job fresh out of college with a English or Writing degree.

Theodoric:I respect this review very much. It's really accurate and it's by the author that inspired me to start writing. Now about this world. It exists in my mind for more than ten yrs now. It's really worked out and detailed. I've been writing drafts bout it for about six yrs. Anyway, I'm writing this part-time. And I'm most of the time not able to write bcs of the private reasons. I've been trying to update one chap per day now, but it's not going to last for long tho. I'm still in highschool so I need to study a lot and I plan a uni later on. However, this novel and the book I plan later on are the most precious things in my life, so every review or comment like this means a lot. Peace to y'all, brothers.
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