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Nightmare_Hydra
Nightmare_HydraLv116yr
2018-10-24 13:41

Very good so far. Though I wish there was more "Day Time" written. As in there are to many time skips. Like there's only a few sentences then its the next day. Then a few more sentences then a weeks passed. While at the dojo a few paragraphs then 3 months passed. Its to fast I guess is what I'm getting at. I would like it if there was more to their day instead of training then some kisses and now bed time. The days over. Now its the next day. All summed in 2 pages. It needs more detail is what I'm getting at. Besides that its awesome. I love it. Keep up the good work. Writing quality: Exelent. Stability of updates: 5 chapters in 2 days. Very good. Story Development: Good but like I said it needs more detail. Character Design: Good but once again it needs detail. Like we know MJ has a sexy body but we really don't know what she looks like. What color hair? How long is her hair? Color of her eyes? Little nose? Same with parker. Though I do like his nickname that MJ calls him. "Tiger". World Background: Duh it's the marvel universe with but a slight twist. So I say its good. But it wouldn't hurt with a little detail. Hope this helps. -HYDRA

Spiderman Ultimate Peter Parker

Daoist_Over_God
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113 Chs

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TheDaoOfTheBear
TheDaoOfTheBearLv11

I had this same thought. It’s kind of hard to keep up with how much time has passed, and feels a kinda like it’s in a rush to get back to the action.

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geot5
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xp

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I loved author's previous work and I love where this one is going.! It's still the start of the story, so don't expect an accurate review. So many of the spiderman fanfics are aimed for the younger readers and M.Cs there are naiv*e and sissy. I hope this one is not the same. To the author- Please make it original, like your previous novel. people want to read about badass spider for a change.!

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FujiCigarette
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Writing quality 3.8/5 - i cant give 5 because im not a master of the english language, didnt give 4 because there are mistakes which are cause by either typing too fast or not proofreading it enough. some missing letters or missing words thats all, but overall pretty good. Stability of updates - 4/5 - fairly fast, good rate of chapter releases. Story development 3/5 - basically an OC-insert/shipping/gary stu-type of fic which some people hate but i actually like this story. but still average Character design 3/5 - which is already pretty good considering the mc is an OC-insert. World background 5/5 - a good score for this fic as it uses elements of the marvel verse in a way that i actually think is very good. personal thoughts is that author has the same problem as i do when typing that some words get skipped over, also i keep seeing people in the comments section praising this fic to the high heavens but really it is just a decent fic.... while not that good, it is still good enough that i added it to my library...

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OnlyMesha
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Hey, dude uhhh i missed ur story u know its been 1 yr, i mean u can just tell us ur condition. U don't even have any activity 😔 Pls just tell us ur condition okay if u u can't writing anymore than tell us we will usderstand well at least i will understand

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PandaKun
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Honestly, this is probably my favorite story on Webnovel right now. The updates are frequent enough to still be fresh in your mind but the waits seem to take forever. The Author knows his Marvel lore extremely well. The characters seem well done (perhaps a bit of reliance from the official Marvel movies/books but since it is a fan fiction it's to be expected). All in all would heavily recommend even if you're just a normie Marvel watcher

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I've been waiting 4 years for this to continue. In my top 3 Spider-Man fanfics I've read and in my top 20 overall...........................

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Justin_T
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ok so this fanfic is farely high quality, it doesn't have any horrible or even particularly noticeable grammar mistakes and it has a interesting story. I see no reason not to give it a good review.

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Leon_Alquino
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AT LAST! I miss this story so much ! I don't know if it was a pseudopremonition or a coincidence ( probably a coincidence , sometimes I kept remembering this story ) but today . kept thinking about it shortly after waking up . Author , a few years ago you said you were going to come back and when you didn't , I was upset , as were many others , but I'm glad you're back ! Question : Did you just come back to finish the story or are you going to continue with it for a while longer? And will you also update/continue your other stories ?

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