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ArgonautLifeLine
ArgonautLifeLineLv142yr
2023-01-31 08:07

the writing quality is good. storyline started decently but it veered from my expectations not in a good way. quite a lot of time skip or flash back that makes the story confusing and boring in my opinion. this story is just not to my liking I guess but yeah the writing quality is really good and I wish the author good luck on their future endeavors

My teenage high school romance comedy can't be this perverted!

NimtheWriter
4.5
97 Chs

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NimtheWriter
NimtheWriterAuthor

Thanks for your reviews. I'm the process of rewriting old chapters and changing some plot holes, would you share the mentions of any past chapters that felt off or confusing?

2yr
NimtheWriter
NimtheWriterAuthor

I'm in*

NimtheWriter:Thanks for your reviews. I'm the process of rewriting old chapters and changing some plot holes, would you share the mentions of any past chapters that felt off or confusing?
2yr
ArgonautLifeLine
ArgonautLifeLineLv14

it starts to get a bit more confusing for me around turning point and beyond and after the time skip I just lost track of the story

NimtheWriter:Thanks for your reviews. I'm the process of rewriting old chapters and changing some plot holes, would you share the mentions of any past chapters that felt off or confusing?
2yr
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NimtheWriter
NimtheWriterAuthor

Alright, thanks for the feedback. I had already begun reworking the first part and had plans of rewriting the timeskip part but wasn't sure. Now it's confirmed.

ArgonautLifeLine:it starts to get a bit more confusing for me around turning point and beyond and after the time skip I just lost track of the story
2yr
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NimtheWriter
NimtheWriterAuthor

Hi there~ Another shameless 4.8 stars review from myself. This is my first ever crossover fanfic with Oreigaru or snafu x DxD, the characters are all written as closely to their original counterparts while canon will not be followed. I try to make the storyline feel logical and not forced. Hey, if you liked it be sure to leave a review, share and donate the stones for more!

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Mr_mysterio
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to tell the truth, the writing is good and the personality of the characters is consistent with the original story and well that's the problem, average story at best, as the crossover isn't supported, making for an extremely boring story. the author had to look for other anime to cross or have changed the personality of the protagonist

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Hehehe... this is good. Really good job portraying the characters, making it seem like alive and the world building as well, hnngh. I don't like nitpicking so I'm gonna end this here. Of course, there's bound to be problems, but I won't say anything about it. I can't find proper words to point those out, so I'll just let someone else do so. And as always, this isn't for everyone.(Honestly too early to make this review tho.)

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Argomi
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Too much drama for a DxD FanFic. When people think of DxD, they think of Unique Characters, Strength Class, Harem and Beautiful Girls, as well as Modern Fantasy with Mythologies. However, when I tried to read it, I was soon surprised to read Hachiman with too much drama. There's nothing unique to the MC. No drive for power, Not that talented, having disadvantages for having A Dragon-Type Sacred Gear as well as having literal 'mental damages'. I fear that a Netorare might even happen where Rias and Akeno abandon MC for Issei since he's literally the best version of MC. He's charismatic, better sacred-gear, has a massive dream and his hunger for it as well as talent, potential, and mental strength. I really do hope that MC would find his dream where he would literally do anything for it. Wasting time in a DxD World is a big no-no for Hachiman since he isn't really that talented. I know that he's damaged on the inside but please do hope to find some good reasons to make Hachiman better.

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Devil023
Devil023Lv4

i was expecting something better but it was disappointing. Conversation are not good. even having the good plot the MC is such a irritating person.

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ManofcultureQ_Q
ManofcultureQ_QLv4

This fic is great!! The author was able to show hachiman's character pretty nicely. All the characters are similar to their original selves. It really is a masterpiece in my eyes so keep it up Author-san and plz don't drop 🤗🤗

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CarolineInPajama
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Underrated novel. Writing Quality is very satisfying Updates are slow... BUT don't drop it Story Development.. Its not that boring but not that good too... Character Design... Its very good, Rias became likable, Akeno too, well to put it on perspective they all have personalities. World Background? DxD and oregairu maybe there will be new anime.. Hope so.. But overall this novel is underrated. We need POWER STONES so Author-sama can UPDATE FASTER!!! Take my last POWER STONE!!!!

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Capt_Eye_Collector
Capt_Eye_CollectorLv4

I hope you never drop this. This is my favorite dxd fanfic foe now. @#%@&$&@$##%%@%##%%@&#&#&#&@&&%#%@&@&@#%@%#%#%%#&#&@&&#&#&#&&#&##

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Azzadel
AzzadelLv4

this is a great novel that was well planned but sadly not for me. the mc just lacks a motive or drive to get stronger or maybe things would have been changed in the later chapters since I hadn't read past chapter 15

2yr
Melitia_Snek
Melitia_SnekLv5

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