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2019-05-11 22:31

Hahahaha the story is pretty awesome but it lacks a bit of something but in time I'm sure author_san will figure it out so I rated 5 out of 5 for future preparations so please don't disappoinment me.

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Morvian
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WQ - 5star since for me your skill in writing is good, basically I always give 5 star to every author who's talent in writing is more than me since I'm trash in writing. SU - Update release is better than me so 5star again, hopefully you will stay like thay for your reader. SD - Story is .... well since the plot is so cliches, if I was you I'll write the system using emergency method to absorb poison into MC's body and change MC constitutes into that poison or yin body. this worsened when you kill his father but reaction from MC is quite lacking since MC saying himself that he didn't even know them enough to feel close. how will he feel close if they died early lol?~ so 3star CD - almost same with above, since I read him being jerk like that when his father death and he just ' ah father, too bad we didn't that close and my feeling for my parents is almost non-existent and only guilt feeling left he has for his parents. lastly he's hiding his true ability so its 3 star since this is overused method. I know it since he want to be stronger first before being open that he's strong but that poison should prevent him being able to cultivate but he's clearly telling them he can cultivate but he's hiding his real power to a girl that want to protect him!~ if I was him, I'll tell her my real power so she can be at ease and I'll tell her not to have mindset protecting me since she would be target of his enemy later. WB - not much but since I'm being biased on 2 category into 3 star, so I'll give this 4star to make my overall review into 4 star!!~ since myself is author always get harsh critic so I know how you feel if the review giver is being too much jerk!~ Suggestions, later if you make another novel!~ don't use overused plot and cliches, since so many people will drop it midway!~ make your own style so your novel will be unique!~

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