Love it saiyans are arrogant so that makes sense but I would try to work on character base it seems bland from an referencing point as it goes 1. OP MC Then build foundation of saiyan back ground small fight mystery in the helpful shadow character then OP build up again but still no description besides the arrogance and small attachment at the end for family. 2. UNIVERSE and changeling the planets Yea planet sadala if I'm correct as it in 7 good but there has to be a change of pace or your going to stub your toe if you try to change it later as it will flow differently with future events your possible going to throw in the mix. 3.back ground drop Trying to figure out if the family has any life to them as it seems a short appearance here and there but can't get attached to any it's only focused on MC (which doesn't show that your wrong but there is little life in his well life). Trying to get over the hurtle that is his power seems like a challenge?
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