webnovel
LastGod
LastGodLv56yr
2019-03-11 23:39

First thing I will say is i know there are a lot of reincarnation stories but that doesn't mean you have to write one. In the first chapter you are basically telling who ever is reading this to go **** themselves along with your MC. You condescendingly fashion yourself as a god and egotistically "play with yourself" while we watch. Instead of establishing your character and the walls of the world you are trying to create. You ripe them down **** in your hand and hold it out to say is this good enough. No its not even for a web novel readers deserve better. In the first chapter I could tell how much you did not care about this novel so WHY WRITE IT?

Liked by 19 people

LIKE
Replies3
squirtle_sqaud_z
squirtle_sqaud_zLv3

Then read game of Destruction its franchise of dbs

Rutuja_Tawde
Rutuja_TawdeLv2

You should also try Dragon Ball Super: Game Of Destruction

squirtle_sqaud_z:Then read game of Destruction its franchise of dbs
Loserworld301
Loserworld301Lv2

Anda juga harus mencoba Dragon Ball Super: Game Of Destruction

Other Reviews
YameteAuthorSan
YameteAuthorSanLv5
Nani_boi_1234
Nani_boi_1234Lv10
Related Stories

Ben 10: Apex Hero

You know the story. Ten-year-old Ben Tennyson, his ten-year-old paternal first-cousin Gwen, and their paternal Grandpa Max start their summer camping trip. Ben goes stomping off into the woods after another fight with Gwen, whom he is not happy to have along on the trip, and is almost crushed when a meteor crash lands, only to discover it’s an alien cargo pod. When he examines it, he finds a mysterious, watch-like device, called the Omnitrix. As Ben reaches inside the pod for it, the device attached permanently to his wrist and gives him the ability to transform into a numerous variety of alien life-forms, each with their own unique powers and abilities. Although Ben realizes that he has a responsibility to help and save others with these new abilities at his disposal, he is not above a little ten-year-old super-powered mischief now and then. Along with Gwen and Max, Ben embarks on an adventure to fight evil, both extraterrestrial and earthly. But what if someone else finds himself in Ben's place? Someone who has a different personality from the original superhero, not afraid of dirtying his hands seeking to satisfy his endless ambition. AU. Harem. +18 just to be safe. *Eventually synopsis might change to less lame one... tags may change as well, depending on the progression of the story. Disclaimer, this is a fan-fic, so credit goes to original authors. And this is a world of fiction. Names, characters, business, places, events and incidents are either the products of the author’s imagination or used in a fictional manner. Any resemblance to actual people, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental. I don’t claim ownership over the Cover Photo.

Daichi_TBR193 · Others
4.6
20 Chs