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Director
DirectorLv46yr
2019-01-08 06:03

Endless Girls : Infinite Harem :( Writing Quality = Amazing Update Speed = Like a Speed demon But unfortunately, even though author makes such well-written characters. Why does he have to add almost every girl into the MC's harem? I don't mind harem, but if girls just for some reason just keeps falling inlove to our MC and other men are almost nonexistent, the story feels dull. Especially as if the story, the MC's character is driven accordingly to his harem. I don't even care if his harem gets left out if he travels other worlds, infact I'd be rather welcoming of that idea. I really like this novel in the beginning, it was very fun. We see our MC grow up, shape up for every encounter. Our MC desires *******; to have fun, but he seems binded again albeit not to chains but to his harem.

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Director
DirectorLv4

Lol why is fr33dom censored.

Director
DirectorLv4

Also I'd like to add, although the harem is overdone, aside from that, such as character interaction/development(how it shapes up our MC is probably one of the best I've seen, for a fanfiction atleast), world building has potential if we set aside the focus on the harem, Grammar is also well done.

Einlion
EinlionAuthor

Though the Harem doesn't go away, things do get progressively better as the story continues~! I hope you're able to catch up to the current chapters in the future o3o!

Director
DirectorLv4

Well, that does motivate me to catch up to the latest chapters, and it does amaze me how you replied on this review so fast!

Einlion:Though the Harem doesn't go away, things do get progressively better as the story continues~! I hope you're able to catch up to the current chapters in the future o3o!
Einlion
EinlionAuthor

I had just finished another chapter recently and thought I'd check to see if there was anything new :P

Director:Well, that does motivate me to catch up to the latest chapters, and it does amaze me how you replied on this review so fast!
yourname128
yourname128Lv5

Keep thinking it's bad, but there are thousands or tens of thousands who think otherwise.

Director:Also I'd like to add, although the harem is overdone, aside from that, such as character interaction/development(how it shapes up our MC is probably one of the best I've seen, for a fanfiction atleast), world building has potential if we set aside the focus on the harem, Grammar is also well done.
yourname128
yourname128Lv5

Nice.

Einlion:Though the Harem doesn't go away, things do get progressively better as the story continues~! I hope you're able to catch up to the current chapters in the future o3o!
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

I tired to leave a 3 star review like this a few days ago and it was Deleted. It is fine when it is a few girls but it is EVERY single girl in the story that is HOT for him. There are almost no normal girls or guys in the story. All but 2 of his entire guild (Familia) is made up of his Harem of girls that are chasing after him or sleeping with him.

Einlion
EinlionAuthor

If the 'review' is literally a complaint, why shouldn't it be deleted? Complaining does nothing to inform new readers, nor does it help guide the direction of the story at all. It is literally just treating the review section as a blog board.

SorcererCat:I tired to leave a 3 star review like this a few days ago and it was Deleted. It is fine when it is a few girls but it is EVERY single girl in the story that is HOT for him. There are almost no normal girls or guys in the story. All but 2 of his entire guild (Familia) is made up of his Harem of girls that are chasing after him or sleeping with him.
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

I'm sorry you feel that way, but you don't seem to understand what reviews are about.

Einlion:If the 'review' is literally a complaint, why shouldn't it be deleted? Complaining does nothing to inform new readers, nor does it help guide the direction of the story at all. It is literally just treating the review section as a blog board.
Einlion
EinlionAuthor

There is a metric provided for a reason, none of which includes the fragile sensibilities of people that have nothing better to do than feed negativity into the world.

SorcererCat:I'm sorry you feel that way, but you don't seem to understand what reviews are about.
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

You should stop letting your anger control you. Like I stated for some reason you don't seem to understand what reviews are and what their uses are for. Just stop getting so angry over these reviews so easily. You need to stop thinking reviews are only there to tell you how fantastic you are. That is not the main reason for reviews. Reviews are their for people to post or state their opinions on the LN or content that they read. And for others to read them and try to come to an understanding of what the LN may be about or may not be about. Authors can look at these reviews and see where people seem to have issues or dislikes in their story telling and ether change it or not. Many authors are grateful for this information.

Einlion:There is a metric provided for a reason, none of which includes the fragile sensibilities of people that have nothing better to do than feed negativity into the world.
Einlion
EinlionAuthor

See, you go out of your way to make unsubstantiated claims as, instead of angry, I'm more disheartened by the fact that people have the entire internet at their fingertips, an entire planet to explore, thousands of career opportunities, and hundreds of interesting people to meet yet, ignoring all that, they find more 'meaning' in being an asshole on the internet than doing a single productive thing with their time. Tell me, what are you even hoping to accomplish by throwing around false labels? If I say, "You should stop letting your pedophilic urges control you", does that automatically make you a pedophile? It is a completely unsubstantiated claim that is formulated entirely just to continue an argument that, by all rights, never should have been a thing. Everyone doesn't like something or the other but, we learn as kids that it is better to say something nice rather than say anything at all. If you don't like veggies, you still eat them because you know it is good for you, just like you work with co-workers you may hate. Acting childish and throwing a tantrum just because you don't like something does not elevate you onto a platform that entitles you to continue whining about it incessantly for days on end. Do something more productive with your life instead of trying to argue with someone you'll likely never meet, in a book you may very well have dropped, on a website with tens of thousands of alternatives. Seriously, grow the **** up. And as for your completely asinine remark, almost entirely founded in nothing more than your own mind, I don't treat the review section as a place where you should tell the author how much you enjoy their novel. I encourage constructive criticism, as the whole purpose of this novel is to improve my overall writing quality. I do not, however, condone pissants who think they can say destructive things without offering even a single fucking micron of positivity and yet expect to be taken seriously. If I showed up in a prison and told someone that has been there for years that they shouldn't have committed a crime, they would look at me like I'm a fucking retard. What, am I expected to change the entire story because some special snowflake got upset around the 200 chapters mark? No, that is completely retarded, almost to a monstrous extent. If you're only rehashing what someone else said, providing no beneficial information, you are simply a troll that wants to be heard. If you can't understand this VERY SIMPLE concept, then you haven't been worth the effort with which these words were written. Lastly, the review section is not a place to make your opinion known, as it is called the REVIEW section, not the opinion board. This is not a blog, no matter how much Tumblr has shaped your mind to think you're entitled to say whatever you want, whenever you want, without having to take responsibility. And yes, a lot of what I said was entirely unsubstantiated, but you're the one that decided to put yourself on a platform to get **** all over. I was happily writing a story for people that have found it interesting while, instead of doing ANYTHING ELSE, you decided to waste both of our time in MY review section. If you walk into someone's house and begin making a mess, you don't blame them for getting mad at you, you accept fucking responsibility like an ***** and either take a step back or move the **** on. These actions of your's are completely senseless and serve no possible benefit for anyone involved, especially yourself. Throw around as many platitudes as you want but, until you are fucking informed, you're nothing more than a patsy and a twat.

SorcererCat:You should stop letting your anger control you. Like I stated for some reason you don't seem to understand what reviews are and what their uses are for. Just stop getting so angry over these reviews so easily. You need to stop thinking reviews are only there to tell you how fantastic you are. That is not the main reason for reviews. Reviews are their for people to post or state their opinions on the LN or content that they read. And for others to read them and try to come to an understanding of what the LN may be about or may not be about. Authors can look at these reviews and see where people seem to have issues or dislikes in their story telling and ether change it or not. Many authors are grateful for this information.
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

There is something wrong with the way you see and understand things. I'm tired of trying to explain something as simple as "what a review really is and what it's purpose is for". All you are doing is getting angry over facts. I have tried to nicely explain these things to you to try and help you understand them better. Instead you get angry and keep arguing. There is no longer a reason for me to type to you. You have already declared that I'm nothing more than a troll with no life. I tried to help you understand and you refuse to understand. You can lead a horse to water but you can't make it drink. This is the situation that has occurred.

Einlion:See, you go out of your way to make unsubstantiated claims as, instead of angry, I'm more disheartened by the fact that people have the entire internet at their fingertips, an entire planet to explore, thousands of career opportunities, and hundreds of interesting people to meet yet, ignoring all that, they find more 'meaning' in being an asshole on the internet than doing a single productive thing with their time. Tell me, what are you even hoping to accomplish by throwing around false labels? If I say, "You should stop letting your pedophilic urges control you", does that automatically make you a pedophile? It is a completely unsubstantiated claim that is formulated entirely just to continue an argument that, by all rights, never should have been a thing. Everyone doesn't like something or the other but, we learn as kids that it is better to say something nice rather than say anything at all. If you don't like veggies, you still eat them because you know it is good for you, just like you work with co-workers you may hate. Acting childish and throwing a tantrum just because you don't like something does not elevate you onto a platform that entitles you to continue whining about it incessantly for days on end. Do something more productive with your life instead of trying to argue with someone you'll likely never meet, in a book you may very well have dropped, on a website with tens of thousands of alternatives. Seriously, grow the **** up. And as for your completely asinine remark, almost entirely founded in nothing more than your own mind, I don't treat the review section as a place where you should tell the author how much you enjoy their novel. I encourage constructive criticism, as the whole purpose of this novel is to improve my overall writing quality. I do not, however, condone pissants who think they can say destructive things without offering even a single fucking micron of positivity and yet expect to be taken seriously. If I showed up in a prison and told someone that has been there for years that they shouldn't have committed a crime, they would look at me like I'm a fucking retard. What, am I expected to change the entire story because some special snowflake got upset around the 200 chapters mark? No, that is completely retarded, almost to a monstrous extent. If you're only rehashing what someone else said, providing no beneficial information, you are simply a troll that wants to be heard. If you can't understand this VERY SIMPLE concept, then you haven't been worth the effort with which these words were written. Lastly, the review section is not a place to make your opinion known, as it is called the REVIEW section, not the opinion board. This is not a blog, no matter how much Tumblr has shaped your mind to think you're entitled to say whatever you want, whenever you want, without having to take responsibility. And yes, a lot of what I said was entirely unsubstantiated, but you're the one that decided to put yourself on a platform to get **** all over. I was happily writing a story for people that have found it interesting while, instead of doing ANYTHING ELSE, you decided to waste both of our time in MY review section. If you walk into someone's house and begin making a mess, you don't blame them for getting mad at you, you accept fucking responsibility like an ***** and either take a step back or move the **** on. These actions of your's are completely senseless and serve no possible benefit for anyone involved, especially yourself. Throw around as many platitudes as you want but, until you are fucking informed, you're nothing more than a patsy and a twat.
Einlion
EinlionAuthor

Just because someone isn't in line with your biased views, it doesn't mean there is something wrong with their thought process. Almost everything I said was determined by how you acted, not something I arbitrarily threw out of nowhere. Take responsibility for your own words and actions instead of trying to shift the blame onto the person you antagonized. That is part of growing the **** up.

SorcererCat:There is something wrong with the way you see and understand things. I'm tired of trying to explain something as simple as "what a review really is and what it's purpose is for". All you are doing is getting angry over facts. I have tried to nicely explain these things to you to try and help you understand them better. Instead you get angry and keep arguing. There is no longer a reason for me to type to you. You have already declared that I'm nothing more than a troll with no life. I tried to help you understand and you refuse to understand. You can lead a horse to water but you can't make it drink. This is the situation that has occurred.
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

Ignored. I'm done with your foolishness.

Einlion:Just because someone isn't in line with your biased views, it doesn't mean there is something wrong with their thought process. Almost everything I said was determined by how you acted, not something I arbitrarily threw out of nowhere. Take responsibility for your own words and actions instead of trying to shift the blame onto the person you antagonized. That is part of growing the **** up.
Einlion
EinlionAuthor

Yeah, just continue ignoring your own part in things and move on, as you should have from the outset xD. Have a good day.

SorcererCat:Ignored. I'm done with your foolishness.
UnderTerry
UnderTerryLv5

https://forum.webnovel.com/d/25834-why-are-authors-and-translators-allowed-to-artificially-boosting-their-ratings exactly this guy, abusing the system

Wallker
WallkerLv4

Author is a shameless person who deletes bad reviews

Anthony1967
Anthony1967Lv4

Not against your novel even if I find it mentally overwhelming to log all of the names of the harem, my fault not yours it's just hard to remember who certain characters are at times but I always get it eventually in the end, if you want only real comments on the review section why don't you delete all of the reviews that don't have anything to say? Like the many 5 star reviews that are just This novel is good! ................... (Spamming to make up word count) Where is the information in that? I acknowledge that the previous commenter was an angsty fallacy filled weak argumented person but his logic isn't completely faulty. If you only want real reviews then delete everything that isn't real!

Einlion:Yeah, just continue ignoring your own part in things and move on, as you should have from the outset xD. Have a good day.
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Bored_Reader_
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I mostly write this just to help people understand some of the premise and not be disappointed if they are looking for something else. Now, this is not a wish fulfillment story about travelling across various anime worlds and fighting and adventuring. This is a story about the life of a 14 year old who has spent his entire life in captivity, being exploited by others . Literally. He was found to have panacea like blood as a newborn and was kept in a research facility since he was like a month old. He has not been loved or cared for at all and is just used as a blood producer. His common sense comes only from animes and mangas. Now, you have to understand is that what he does and how he acts is entirely different from normal considering he is a broken, ignorant child. He does not process emotion as casually as we do and is basically just a giant bleeding heart because of his past. Because of this he will not act like shounen protagonists or wuxia MCs at all. They are hot blooded idiots who like fighting, want women and are usually extremely ambitious. Vahn is none of those. He is someone who has been given a life and freedom and just wants to experience it. To him, fighting is a nuisance and despite his claims of being a battle junkie, does not like having fights to the death. He does want to explore, but he has no urgent desire to make it his immediate goal. Understand that this is a rather realistic story of Vahn's growth despite the fantasy tag. He mostly just wants to live in peace and love because of the fact he never had it for the first 14 years of his life. He appreciates it. Some of you like to think of him as a generic japanese protagonist but thing is he grew up watching them as well as suffering great injustice so he has an actual reason to be so merciful. If you expect an MC that goes around all excited and battle hungry or has some vague reason to become the strongest, this is not it. Also, I'll just adress another issue that is going to come up as you progress. He has a huge harem. As in over a dozen girls after the first 100 chapters or so. And the reason for this is because he is a capable male that is highly empathetic and thus becomes attractive to most women who live in a rather shitty world. Also, since he himself has no resistance to others, he accepts basically everyone. He craves love and if someone gives it he'll take her. So yeah, it can become rather unbearable to watch him forsake higher power just to mess around with the harem members and basically start a slice of life but if he doesn't do this, it would be highly unrealistic. This is not a one dimensional novel about fighting progressively stronger enemies and becoming the greatest of them all for no particular reason and neither is it for exploring universes and collecting women. It's about a shattered person trying to enjoy life and fulfill his desires. He wants to explore but won't just leave his family behind for it. He wants to become strong but won't neglect his reason for becoming strong for it. I hope you found this useful.

ThomasDarkrose
ThomasDarkroseLv12

Writing Quality: 5/5 - While there are occasional typos, ****y tiny grammatical errors or punctuation errors, they do not detract from the story in any way. The writing is excellent and just draws you in. Stability of Updates: 5/5 - The author pumps out chapters like a madman all in order to feed the addicted souls he has created. 'Nuff said. Story Development: 5/5 - The story starts with a nieve and broken main character, Vahn, and through interactions with the world and the characters in it, he grows. Vahn still has a lot of growing to do and I, personally, look forward to seeing the man that Vahn will grow into. Character Design: 4/5 - I would love to give the author 5/5 stars just for the design of Vahn, but I prefer to be honest and forthright. Because this is a fan-fiction many of the main characters were already designed by the original author of DanMachi. That said, Einlion takes those pre-existing characters and completely makes them his own without violating the source material. While reading this story you will be hard pressed to find any reason to complain about the use of the pre-existing characters, their reactions, or their believability. World Background: 4/5 - Again, I would love to make this 5/5 stars, but the story takes place in a pre-existing world. Just like the characters though, the world is not violated or discarded it is embraced and honored. Fan-fictions are a tough genre to write in, you have to take a world and characters that already exist, and are loved, then make them your own while writing your own story. Einlion does this exceptionally well and is crafting an amazing story that follows a unique and amazing character. The only thing I could possibly complain about is that I found this novel now instead of a year from now, I can't binge read it nearly enough. On a final note, if you are a fan of DanMachi, or anime in general, and looking for a story with a unique and entertaining main character than I strongly recommend reading this story.

TFH
TFHLv6

Dude.... You are writting an amazing world here... the quality of the writting is excellent and i dont believe i have found any mistake, the character development is marvelous dude... each individual character is seen as a person with alll their characteristics. About the development of the story, while i find that its somewhat... well, really fast paced i would like it to slow down. Its like you want to climb a mountain but you dont go by foot but by helicopter. So far the MC is soul tier 2 and tier 9 is the highest known currently since the path is an artifact lvl 9, if mc goes to soul tier 3 to fast it will make things feel rushed. Now speaking of danmachi, to be honest i would find it a waste should the MC leave, currently danmachi is cataloged as 1-4.... But a way exist to make it 1-5 and so on i believe. So it would be awesome if the world can level up too, and there exist the posiblity of even mixing up worlds with portals so as to make that MC could come and go between worlds. Even the MC could get a portal skill to come back to Hephaestus and the others. IT would be awesome if you can make it with the help of MC that people can go beyond lvl 7, which is ottar from the freya family and reach lvl 8 or higher. I say it again, it would be a huge waste and terrible mistake in my opinion to leave behind danmachi should the mc go to another world. This is beacause danmachi universe didnt existed before the mc went inside, the path i believe created that world, gods and all. So its fine to think that the path has the ability to make universes that are weaker than it, who says you cant make other universes and mix them up? Even more you can put it that inside the laberith is a portal to another world too, and to make things easier it was found a portal in floor 60 for example that can send you back to the surface or from the surface to floor 60 if you have reached it.

MoonLord
MoonLordLv14

This story is one of my most favorites that I have ever read, from Royalroad to Webnovel, I've been reading stories for years. I've loved how this story showed me the gradual change in the MC, how his hard work made him grow stronger physically and mentally, however unfortunately, the story ended up following the usual harem template... I'm not saying that harem stories are bad, in fact I love a lot of stories like that, however when every character introduced is a romantic interest.. no, more like a sure fact that the character is immediately gonna join his harem... Because for some unknown reasons they immediately fall in love with him and act the same way as every girl that has feelings for him, relationships between the MC and the female characters are either Harem member, possible and future harem member and non-harem member, not a single friendly relation. The story quickly became bland. Also there's no friendship between the MC and any other Male character, in fact there's not a single interesting guy that the MC can befriend. The weird fact is how the female characters always end up falling in love with the MC in a matter of days, there's no developing and gradual romance in this story with the exception of veeerrrryyy few... I like some of the girls because of their personalities and gradual development, however for most of them, they just pop out like popcorns and the MC ACCEPTS every single girl that says "I Love You" as if they've had enough interactions to fall in love... and he can never say no. I love this story, this is why I'm frustrated with how it is developing. .. though I'll keep reading hoping that it'll get better, I'm just sad it developed that way.

AnActualLivingPoet
AnActualLivingPoetLv4

The story started out quite well, it was interesting, it had action, but it turned to sh*t at the 200 or so chapter mark. I mean don't get me wrong, your writing quality and updates are still awesome, but the way you introduced the heroine's from Danmachi was in a word slutty. They became generic Dating Sim gals on easy mode. They easily- no brainlessly fell for a pathetic guy who can "Emphatize" with them. In 3 mere months nonetheless. (F*ck! I can do that, hold my beer) I won't go into anymore details about this as I've already read a few reviews that were more specific about this topic. As for Vahn, I just plainly don't like him. You have great skills author, but Vahn is ****. He's just a cheap knock off of Bell. Without his plot armor "The path" he can't even compare. He's just a sad child that didn't know how to belong in the world, but somehow became a great socialite that could get every heroine(although braindead) to bed with only a few interactions. Give an autistic person a chance to reincarnate as a normal one, then give him "The Path", a handsome face and a large dick. I guarantee he'll do a better job than this faggot. Anyways, Writing quality - 5 Stability in updates - 5 Story Development - 1 (because 7/10 chapters are more on Vahn's daily life flirting with who knows how many girls especially in the early chapters) Character Design - 1 (You designed Vahn enough said) World Background - 1 (Danmachi is a great world don't get me wrong, but it's nothing new. I already read about it in the original don't want to read the same thing here) Overall : 2.6 Little advice bro, criticism isn't bad, you can learn and grow from them. But if you insist that everyone is wrong and you are right then you'll never be number 1.

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