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Moepop1
Moepop1Lv146yr
2018-11-10 00:24

Writing Quality is top notch, really nice read. Stability Of Updates are probably the best on this site, not going to lie. Fantastic job. Not going to give credit where's it is not due, author only designed a couple characters fully. World Background is danmachi. As far as Story Development... every chapter after chapter 100 is him flirting with some girl with sprinkles of danmachi drama here and there. I mean overall i still read 550 chapters of this book and it was a great binge but you can only read so many chapters of Mr.Hands

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Moepop1
Moepop1Lv14

not 550* 220*

200000000000000011
200000000000000011Lv4

Não se preocupe, o autor só se importar sobre harém nada mais!

Nydre
NydreLv14

Insightful.

200000000000000011:Não se preocupe, o autor só se importar sobre harém nada mais!
SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

I tired to leave a 3 star review like this a few days ago and it was Deleted. It is easy to have a HIGH review rate when you delete anything that isn't 5 stars. It is fine when it is a few girls but it is EVERY single girl in the story that is HOT for him. There are almost no normal girls or guys in the story. All but 2 of his entire guild (Familia) is made up of his Harem of girls that are chasing after him or sleeping with him.

yZin
yZinLv10

With that I still can see, more like what I do not like the novel and this trunk of karma if n had this karma would be much better ...

SorcererCat:I tired to leave a 3 star review like this a few days ago and it was Deleted. It is easy to have a HIGH review rate when you delete anything that isn't 5 stars. It is fine when it is a few girls but it is EVERY single girl in the story that is HOT for him. There are almost no normal girls or guys in the story. All but 2 of his entire guild (Familia) is made up of his Harem of girls that are chasing after him or sleeping with him.
Intra_Cetum
Intra_CetumLv1

Seriously hate this author. If you hate your work being taken for granted, how do you think your reviewers feel when you DELETE THEIR REVIEWS AND POSTS!?!

SorcererCat
SorcererCatLv5

This is a quote from the Author about bad reviews being deleted by them: *Einlion* (Author) If the 'review' is literally a complaint, why shouldn't it be deleted? Complaining does nothing to inform new readers, nor does it help guide the direction of the story at all. It is literally just treating the review section as a blog board.

Intra_Cetum:Seriously hate this author. If you hate your work being taken for granted, how do you think your reviewers feel when you DELETE THEIR REVIEWS AND POSTS!?!
UnderTerry
UnderTerryLv5

https://forum.webnovel.com/d/25834-why-are-authors-and-translators-allowed-to-artificially-boosting-their-ratings exactly this guy, abusing the system

Wallker
WallkerLv4

Author is a shameless person who deletes bad reviews

FReeeeeeLightnovel
FReeeeeeLightnovelLv4

this is a bad review and it still exists prove your point

Wallker:Author is a shameless person who deletes bad reviews
Wallker
WallkerLv4

I ment future bad reviews, obviously he's not going to delete his first few where it's in plain view of everyone....go ahead try posting a review below 4 stars see what happens.

FReeeeeeLightnovel:this is a bad review and it still exists prove your point
Wallker
WallkerLv4

I mean really u should think before speaking, post a new one and prove me wrong.

FReeeeeeLightnovel:this is a bad review and it still exists prove your point
FReeeeeeLightnovel
FReeeeeeLightnovelLv4

I don't personally believe that it's a bad story so it would be unfair for me to post a bad review If I don't have a valid reason to post one I won't if I post a bad review as a joke or as a test then he'll remove it because it's just bringing down the score unnecessarily

Wallker:I mean really u should think before speaking, post a new one and prove me wrong.
Wallker
WallkerLv4

Considering how many bots he has posting 5 star reviews, you'd just being making the score more legit by posting a bad one.

FReeeeeeLightnovel:I don't personally believe that it's a bad story so it would be unfair for me to post a bad review If I don't have a valid reason to post one I won't if I post a bad review as a joke or as a test then he'll remove it because it's just bringing down the score unnecessarily
FReeeeeeLightnovel
FReeeeeeLightnovelLv4

I don't see any bots so I can't really comment on that, every single negative review that gave a reason for not liking it like, too much harem, too slow development, or want more action has been kept as far as I can tell

Wallker:Considering how many bots he has posting 5 star reviews, you'd just being making the score more legit by posting a bad one.
Wallker
WallkerLv4

Then all I can say is your blind, not hard to go to newest reveiews and see the same 4+ people spamming 5 stars......your only looking at the oldest posts that's in plain view of everyone and couldn't delete when he first started

FReeeeeeLightnovel:I don't see any bots so I can't really comment on that, every single negative review that gave a reason for not liking it like, too much harem, too slow development, or want more action has been kept as far as I can tell
FReeeeeeLightnovel
FReeeeeeLightnovelLv4

I know those people, they aren't bots they just posted multiple 5 star reviews as a joke, plus have you looked at the review section for a novel before people do that all the time

Wallker:Then all I can say is your blind, not hard to go to newest reveiews and see the same 4+ people spamming 5 stars......your only looking at the oldest posts that's in plain view of everyone and couldn't delete when he first started
Wallker
WallkerLv4

Not bots huh? Doing the same thing over and over again for only one novel continuously...if you say so....I clicked on there profiles....click on Absolut_Reaper profile, tell me he's not a bot...he's a copy paste machine on only this one novel...strange....alright enough said I'm done talking about the obvious to blind people, peace out!

FReeeeeeLightnovel:I know those people, they aren't bots they just posted multiple 5 star reviews as a joke, plus have you looked at the review section for a novel before people do that all the time
FReeeeeeLightnovel
FReeeeeeLightnovelLv4

but he's not though? he's commented on other novels had actual discussions and liked comments, all the evidence points to him being an actual person. You've made a point but you haven't backed it up with any evidence, just statements.

Wallker:Not bots huh? Doing the same thing over and over again for only one novel continuously...if you say so....I clicked on there profiles....click on Absolut_Reaper profile, tell me he's not a bot...he's a copy paste machine on only this one novel...strange....alright enough said I'm done talking about the obvious to blind people, peace out!
Wallker
WallkerLv4

A living person can be categorized as a bot if they do one thing constantly over and over again...maybe he's being paid to spam.

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ThomasDarkrose
ThomasDarkroseLv12

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TFH
TFHLv6

Dude.... You are writting an amazing world here... the quality of the writting is excellent and i dont believe i have found any mistake, the character development is marvelous dude... each individual character is seen as a person with alll their characteristics. About the development of the story, while i find that its somewhat... well, really fast paced i would like it to slow down. Its like you want to climb a mountain but you dont go by foot but by helicopter. So far the MC is soul tier 2 and tier 9 is the highest known currently since the path is an artifact lvl 9, if mc goes to soul tier 3 to fast it will make things feel rushed. Now speaking of danmachi, to be honest i would find it a waste should the MC leave, currently danmachi is cataloged as 1-4.... But a way exist to make it 1-5 and so on i believe. So it would be awesome if the world can level up too, and there exist the posiblity of even mixing up worlds with portals so as to make that MC could come and go between worlds. Even the MC could get a portal skill to come back to Hephaestus and the others. IT would be awesome if you can make it with the help of MC that people can go beyond lvl 7, which is ottar from the freya family and reach lvl 8 or higher. I say it again, it would be a huge waste and terrible mistake in my opinion to leave behind danmachi should the mc go to another world. This is beacause danmachi universe didnt existed before the mc went inside, the path i believe created that world, gods and all. So its fine to think that the path has the ability to make universes that are weaker than it, who says you cant make other universes and mix them up? Even more you can put it that inside the laberith is a portal to another world too, and to make things easier it was found a portal in floor 60 for example that can send you back to the surface or from the surface to floor 60 if you have reached it.

MoonLord
MoonLordLv14

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AnActualLivingPoet
AnActualLivingPoetLv4

The story started out quite well, it was interesting, it had action, but it turned to sh*t at the 200 or so chapter mark. I mean don't get me wrong, your writing quality and updates are still awesome, but the way you introduced the heroine's from Danmachi was in a word slutty. They became generic Dating Sim gals on easy mode. They easily- no brainlessly fell for a pathetic guy who can "Emphatize" with them. In 3 mere months nonetheless. (F*ck! I can do that, hold my beer) I won't go into anymore details about this as I've already read a few reviews that were more specific about this topic. As for Vahn, I just plainly don't like him. You have great skills author, but Vahn is ****. He's just a cheap knock off of Bell. Without his plot armor "The path" he can't even compare. He's just a sad child that didn't know how to belong in the world, but somehow became a great socialite that could get every heroine(although braindead) to bed with only a few interactions. Give an autistic person a chance to reincarnate as a normal one, then give him "The Path", a handsome face and a large dick. I guarantee he'll do a better job than this faggot. Anyways, Writing quality - 5 Stability in updates - 5 Story Development - 1 (because 7/10 chapters are more on Vahn's daily life flirting with who knows how many girls especially in the early chapters) Character Design - 1 (You designed Vahn enough said) World Background - 1 (Danmachi is a great world don't get me wrong, but it's nothing new. I already read about it in the original don't want to read the same thing here) Overall : 2.6 Little advice bro, criticism isn't bad, you can learn and grow from them. But if you insist that everyone is wrong and you are right then you'll never be number 1.

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