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Great Novel. Really liked the story and everything.... It's just that the plot and the characters are so stupid sometimes. 1. King spends fortune to summon a hero. And while every other hero is insanely strong this one seems to be weak. Instead of thinking that the hero might have undiscovered powers and continue his investment, he decides to throw everything he spent on away and treat the hero as if he is worthless. I'm not going to blame him for his actions because the hero truly is an exception and not the type of hero someone would want to have, but letting him get away without doing anything. Letting him just leave after all the money invested into him is stupid. At least make him a slave or something. He just disrespects the king and the king just gets angry and allows him to joint he opposing force. Well, not my cup of tea. 2. Somehow, the hero with nothing to his name enters a drinking contest and loses. However, not only does he not have to pay anything like a loser, someone the owner covers his tab and offers him a 50% discount on everything. Even though he a Lv1 noob, somehow he scares everyone with his supposed aura. Eventually, he not only gets free food and lodgings, someone else is paying for it. Well yeah, I understand being a hero has its perks, but why do they not care about him being a leech. 3. Soon, he happens to come across a merchant who gives free soul artifacts which are supposedly super expensive and rare. He gets two based on giving the knowledge of how to use them and a favor. The dealer just gives them away. The fact that the protagonist has so much plot armor to get OP artifacts at the beginning at no cost is just stupid. NO written agreements. NO trial. NOthing. It's just stupid that he soon also gets a super rare, 8/9 star fox that supposedly can bring down nations. It just is stupid at that point at how much the author is attempting to give you free stuff. It's just not even cool anymore. The characters are literally his doormats, just somehow trusting him and giving him free stuff along the way. Stupid characters acting as antagonists and a stupid protagonist who cannot control his temper. But let me tell the truth, his writing is very good and entertaining. It's just a bit forced and I cannot stomach that much plot armor in one sitting.
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Thank you for the honesty and the critiques!!! I can't properly explain how much that helps me grow as an author. I wrote AJ years back (launched in late spring of 2019). And I always had the goal for each day's chapters to be a bit better than yesterday's. If I were writing it today, there are many things I would tweak, change, rewrite, and/or remove entirely in AJ. But I'm still very proud of how much I grew throughout plotting/writing AJ's million words. Again, thanks for the honesty. If you liked my writing by not necessarily how my first story started, there are 2 things I'd recommend. First, know that AJ's quality grows by leaps and bounds as the story progresses, especially from ch 250ish on. That's when world detail bombs start trickling in (though it's obviously not perfect and can't completely derail from early story issues, vibes, and scenarios). Second, I've got other books, though some are momentarily paused. My most recent ongoing book, with the most pre-launch plotting and planning I've ever done, launched not even two months ago. That would be "Overlord of Outlaws". It's over 100 chapters already and the release rate is about to crank up even more. It's both sci-fi and fantasy, and it's already plotted for thousands of chapters with dozens of different worlds to explore and almost a dozen different races of people to encounter. There are 5 enormous intergalactic governments facing threats, both against each other and the 6 outlaw mob lords with their factions. Most importantly, you follow an outlaw posse/crew being put together for the sake of adventure and found family. Then pack it with ALL the things critiques have taught me over the years and what I'm still learning; making sure twists and turns are as unpredictable yet fully believable as possible. And as much fun as I can cram in along the way.
The sequel's out now with chapters to binge if you'd like. "Outclassing the Achievement Junkie" is my hope of bringing my new experience as an author to the original premise I created, evolving it into what it truly deserves while hoping to avoid a ton of the issues that plagued my early writing š Just thought you'd like to know, in case you want to join the new adventure