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TwilightReverieLv55yr
2019-03-11 00:04

I can't believe I made it through 50 chapters of this story ... The protagonist is dull and uninteresting. He himself is not challenged by anything he encounters, as he has already experienced living in an era after magical culture reached its height. That world may have literally been coming apart at the seams, but it provided the protagonist all the skill and historical knowledge he needs to overcome any and all obstacles he faces. Additionally, the protagonist shows no investment in the setting or other characters. He doesn't care about allies, enemies, or anything happening around him. He simply sets a short-term goal, accomplishes it with little difficulty, and moves on to the next task. Over and over again. The protagonist exhibits no character growth, the setting is never fully explored since the protagonist knows where to find everything he needs, and the plot is flat: the narrative moves from one face slapping to another, with very little pause, and never experiences the rise and fall in energy that a good work demonstrates. In short, this story is bad. It's boring. It's appeal is short-lived: if you read through the first dozen chapters, you've basically read the entire story. You can stop reading at chapter 20 and start again at pretty much any later chapter without feeling like you've missed much. Time for me to shelve this one and move on.

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Bye

ArtistaFeelLv4

Wanna try something different? Try this! "Lyricist: Her Revenge" I'm sure you'll love it.

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^ sarcasm

QuidProJoeLv10

I read a similar length and noticed something odd: not a single mention of any sort of female whatsoever. MCs mom? Nope. Love interest? Nope. Random woman on the street? Nope. Is this world made up of asexually reproducing males? What the ****.

Sarat_NLv2

True.... MC has no motivation other than to become strongest.

Owl_Of_AthensLv11

I agree, I think I’ve only read around 3 female characters in the entire 1100 chapters I’ve read, I just find it funny.

QuidProJoe:I read a similar length and noticed something odd: not a single mention of any sort of female whatsoever. MCs mom? Nope. Love interest? Nope. Random woman on the street? Nope. Is this world made up of asexually reproducing males? What the ****.
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