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SecondTryCharmLv46yr
2019-02-23 03:29

To those of you who are scrolling in order to decide to read a story, here is a real review. Most of the bad reviews (especially the spammer of bad reviews "reign333" <-- posted multiple bad reviews on same story so a troll) don't really have any backing to them, such as the "He's too op" which can be negated by the fact that the MC is from the future thus having more powerful options. I'd like to see some of these people complain about a barbarian with a stick losing to someone with a gun because that is basically what these people are doing, of course the barbarian is gonna lose. The second reason for a bad review is the "All filler, no plot" point of view. If some of these people spent even half a second reading the synopsis, they would know that their argument is invalid. The MC traveling back in time is not going to automatically go after some enemy since the world ended of natural causes I.E sun dying. If you were a time traveler from a future where you died because there was no resources, would you automatically blame a random person you see on the street for all of that? Of course not. These reviewers think this is full of filler because the author did not pull a ultimate world ending villain out of his but and say the world ended because of him. The MC does not have a overarching goal other than to be stronger for the sake of being stronger. I would consider the story at this point in time to feel more like a slice of life hence some of the bad reviews.

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Dis77Lv12

The filler aspect is actually spot on because majority of a chapter would be filled with pointless monologue. Like every scene we need to freeze to know why so and so is doing what when we can easily explain it by actions instead of words. No one would ever read harry potter if every time someone speak they had to stop and say the entire history of said person and why he is saying something. Literally word padding and best to skim this novel so you won't get a headache

PeanutmmLv5

Your logic with the op-ness doesn't make sense, because in that respect people are complaining why there's a gun in the first place, not why a gun beats a stick.

SecondTryCharmLv4

Why are you complaining about the 'gun'? This story is based on the gun a.k.a timetravel/reincarnation. If you are complaining about the main plot, why read it? I'm not fanboying over this but I'm curious, say a story had a #OPMC tag on it and then people complain about the MC being stupid OP, why read it in the first place if you knew what you were going to get yourself into. You should probably try to find another mage story where the MC start from scratch instead then.

ThaShaftLv1

I agree, it’s doesn’t consist of people constantly battling or killing each other and some people don’t like that and want the stories’ MC to have no life besides whatever action he is involved in ig.

ShinyTinCanLv13

The big issue is that as this is a story, there must be something to draw readers in, like an over-arcing antagonist, and it doesn’t have to be a character. The MC could try to regenerate the mana in the world, he learns that it’s actually being siphoned to another dimension, some villain is absorbing all to become a god, etc. Any of the aforementioned plots would involve so much more mystery, intrigue, and overall interest in the story. Also, even if he used a ‘gun’ to fight people, there must be some challenge to overcome. Perhaps if they made him unable to use magic, or someone developed an anti-machinery magic. If you already know what’s gonna happen and the entire plot is revealed since the beginning, there are no “I wonder what happens next” moments

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