Item: Life Hunter
Rating: 3.6
Author: MilkOfCow

MilkOfCowLv146yr

2019-01-08 09:07

I'm currently only ten chapters in, but I've already noticed some patterns that could be improved, especially in terms of writing quality. The big one for me is heavy use of passive voice eg: this character did instead of character said... Using a lot of existance verbs: did, was, is, will. I know the author isn't a native English speaker (I think) and this is a bit more nuanced then general English, but if he cut this out then his writing could be much better. This story isn't particularly unique, but it is still captivating and I'm enjoying it quite a lot. The main character is super generic, but it's still fun to read. A few of the author notes acknowledge his silly ideas and generic plot points, and to paraphrase him- what does it matter as long as it's awesome. I like this philosophy, and feel like this goes against the grain of other authors on this site who get mired down trying to explain away why their ideas aren't stupid. This authors strength lies in the fact that he gives enough detail to feel emersed and not so much that you stop feeling emersed. This author clearly has room for improvement but is definitely worth the read.

Life Hunter

AhraManyu

4.6

273 Chs

Liked by 4 people

Replies3

AhraManyuAuthor

Thank you very much for your review. I appreciated it a lot. And yes, I'm not native. It was self-taught for the most part. Also, I believe that my writing is getting better as you go further in the chapters. It's my first novel after all. It was bound to be like that.

6yr

MilkOfCowLv14

TBH even reading chapters 10-20 I can see improvement, I'll go back an update my review when I'm a little more up to date

AhraManyu:Thank you very much for your review. I appreciated it a lot. And yes, I'm not native. It was self-taught for the most part. Also, I believe that my writing is getting better as you go further in the chapters. It's my first novel after all. It was bound to be like that.

6yr

MilkOfCowLv14

This is a bit of an update to my original review, I'm currently a t chapter 48, and most of there grammatical issues I complained about in the first review are gone. I realized sometime around chapters 15-20 that I was starting to rate five stars rather than four. This has jumped up with some of my favorites on the site. To offer the author something to improve on (if he hasn't already) would be to make sure he doesn't forget verbs, once every two or three chapters I've seen one missing - this isn't particularly argegious as baisically everyone you can figure out what you miss by context clues. Considering this is a problem I find with authors with editors fixing this book before publishing, this is pretty good

6yr

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