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ace_capLv65yr
2019-06-30 20:23

I'm not even halfway through the story but I found it so interesting and refreshing that I just had to leave a review now. Usually I read webnovels as a form of escapism. This story is a tad too realistic for my purposes, but even if the drama was really bugging me, I just had to keep reading. It's different from the usual stories. While it does deal with r@pe, it is not glorified. It is clear from the start that the husbands are assholes and they are very difficult to like, but the story is compelling enough to make one stick with it to see what happens next. Characters are more humanized than the usual cliches and stick figure stand-ins that pass for characters in most stories these days. To be honest, I only started reading this because it's Lonelytree. He's a very reliable translator and I figured I'd give his original story some support. While I was not around to help with motivation while the story was ongoing, I did send a few coffees on Ko-fi. I sure hope the author gets it, and hopefully that somehow makes up for not helping with upvoting this story when it was still being written. I read some reviews from people who were not happy with the ending, but at this point I am in too deep and I have to finish the story now. If there's anything to improve, I think the story would improve with a lot of proofreading and maybe some editing to help with the flow. There were mistakes with word usage and pronouns as well as a few other minor grammatical errors, but not enough to be so distracting as to detract from the story. All in all a good effort for a first novel.

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Really appreciate the support

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Elude
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I'm glad I got past the very first sentence in your novel, my face turned cold after reading a pretty interesting mistake-free synopsis only to see a mistake in the first piece of dialogue. (I think the first piece of dialogue in your CH1 will sound more fluent if rewritten to, "... or will there be others who are going to join you?") However, overall, this is the best original novel in terms of grammar/flow that I've reviewed recently, really good job! The main cast is also very thoroughly described to the point that I can get a rather clear picture of how they look whilst reading - *this includes even the clothes their wearing!*, +1. Others may not like this type of story-telling, but I really enjoyed it. Also, the supporting characters in your novel are both perceptive and not overly stupid which I too enjoy. The only con I would really say is the general story and goal doesn't truly interest me *personally*, as I have my own interests and likes that don't fall under the 'realistic fiction' genre, but that's not a problem since your intended audience is not to people such as myself. (This is also a bit biased since I only read 20 or so chapters, there may very well of been future plots which would have greatly interested me in the coming chapters.) Overall, if you're looking for a good original read with a *female protagonist* and a good touch of *realism* this is a good thing to start with. 4.4/5 If anyone wants me to do an in-depth review, simply @reply to me in one of my reviews and I'll do a truthful in-depth review if I can actually understand the flow of the writing. (I write these reviews so that the section for determining whether someone reads a story is actually truthful and not full of deceit.)

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