I'm glad I got past the very first sentence in your novel, my face turned cold after reading a pretty interesting mistake-free synopsis only to see a mistake in the first piece of dialogue. (I think the first piece of dialogue in your CH1 will sound more fluent if rewritten to, "... or will there be others who are going to join you?") However, overall, this is the best original novel in terms of grammar/flow that I've reviewed recently, really good job! The main cast is also very thoroughly described to the point that I can get a rather clear picture of how they look whilst reading - *this includes even the clothes their wearing!*, +1. Others may not like this type of story-telling, but I really enjoyed it. Also, the supporting characters in your novel are both perceptive and not overly stupid which I too enjoy. The only con I would really say is the general story and goal doesn't truly interest me *personally*, as I have my own interests and likes that don't fall under the 'realistic fiction' genre, but that's not a problem since your intended audience is not to people such as myself. (This is also a bit biased since I only read 20 or so chapters, there may very well of been future plots which would have greatly interested me in the coming chapters.) Overall, if you're looking for a good original read with a *female protagonist* and a good touch of *realism* this is a good thing to start with. 4.4/5 If anyone wants me to do an in-depth review, simply @reply to me in one of my reviews and I'll do a truthful in-depth review if I can actually understand the flow of the writing. (I write these reviews so that the section for determining whether someone reads a story is actually truthful and not full of deceit.)
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