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Diane_McGloneLv25yr
2020-02-04 13:30

This book told a different story and a new spin on Harry Potter. An the life and meaning of love , care and decision for those u well pertacked at all costs .

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I'm going to give the first ACTUAL review. When making a review you don't do it because you like the novel but you want to give critique, saying that it's good or it's bad overall is unproductive. The writing quality and grammar is alright, the author can improve if he goes back and looks at other references to better convey the story. There has been some improvement in later chapters. Stability of updates is perfect but a bit shaky when the author tries to force chapters out because of the reader's demand. It's best to take the release of chapters step by step even if it takes you 50 years. Story development was interesting at first but the starting chapters of who the main character is doesn't correlate much with the later chapters, it's understandable since he got the mother figure and family that he's always wanted but a few years is a bit too short for change in my opinion. But it's fine since the story is still salvageable and it's also stable though I feel that some readers are getting pretty bored from the slug pace of the development. I've never watched or read Harry Potter so this is pretty much a blind road for me that I know a small bit of knowledge of. Character design is good but you can improve by trying to show more of what characters are feeling, I don't feel a connection with the characters since they feel like puppets with a small bit of emotions. World development is fucking Harry Potter, the author is sticking with that world's development besides the variable called the MC.

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