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sunranakaLv44yr
2021-02-07 23:57

All the complaints about him turning into a toddler, pretty much because he has emotion. Complaint about somehow escaping the prison, that you know he was supposed to guard... Then another complaint about Sirius's soul influencing the MC so much that he is now going to protect the black family in his name because the MC feels bad for devouring him.. I think it's perfectly reasonable, to feel indebted to a man you accidentally killed... Not the mention they become his genuine family shortly after by you know, being the first people to have ever cared for him... There is no problem with most of the development, anyone complaining about it just has a personal preference. Now for the ACTUAL review. Writing Quality: Some mistakes here and there, clearly improving as he goes. Stability of Updates: Very good, unfortunately some things happened recently so it's on temporary hiatus for now. Story Development: Most of the story is the same as the standard Harry Potter story, do note that we are following the MC in this world, it's not about the main story. And that story is also due to change in time. Character Design: Love the character, a lot of potential. Some minor, not sure what you're doing. But overal just fine. World Background: I mean it's harry potter, what more do you want? ;) Now if you're going to complain about the high score, note that I believe the story is undervalued.

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Morning_Fragrance
Morning_FragranceLv14

I'm going to give the first ACTUAL review. When making a review you don't do it because you like the novel but you want to give critique, saying that it's good or it's bad overall is unproductive. The writing quality and grammar is alright, the author can improve if he goes back and looks at other references to better convey the story. There has been some improvement in later chapters. Stability of updates is perfect but a bit shaky when the author tries to force chapters out because of the reader's demand. It's best to take the release of chapters step by step even if it takes you 50 years. Story development was interesting at first but the starting chapters of who the main character is doesn't correlate much with the later chapters, it's understandable since he got the mother figure and family that he's always wanted but a few years is a bit too short for change in my opinion. But it's fine since the story is still salvageable and it's also stable though I feel that some readers are getting pretty bored from the slug pace of the development. I've never watched or read Harry Potter so this is pretty much a blind road for me that I know a small bit of knowledge of. Character design is good but you can improve by trying to show more of what characters are feeling, I don't feel a connection with the characters since they feel like puppets with a small bit of emotions. World development is fucking Harry Potter, the author is sticking with that world's development besides the variable called the MC.

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