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Eddicted
EddictedLv56yr
2019-01-15 00:01

1.your novel has a lot of grammer mistakes. 2.your mc is not really mc.he is nothing different from a side charecter 3.you may want to build a world background but all you did is explain and elongate what readers will normally understand and dont need explaining and there by making nearly 36 chapters into fillers and you give unstable updates.you take a very small thing and take an entire chapter to explain it.it looks like you just want to post something to show.you are writing a game genre but didnt go into any action for 40 chapters No wonder you got only 14 reviews in nearly 4 months.who would even be interested in reading a novel that is concentrated on just stating useless,uninteresting stuff for so long. As a reader i would like to suggest you drop this novel as it only makes you look like a writer with "lack of sincierity" and who just wants to elongate the chapters and stuff it with fillers to keep it going. But if this is not what you really meant to write,then i suggest you to write a new novel with some action,real interesting story(not elongating,explaining useless and easily understandable stuff,very excessive useless communication that is neither comedy nor important nor entertaining),making mc powerful not just some guide and caretaker. Goodluck

The Era of Evolution

Pleki
3.9
42 Chs

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Eddicted
EddictedLv5

And i dont know why it shows c27 but i read till chapter 41

6yr
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SubtomicLine80
SubtomicLine80Lv6

i would like to give a 5-star because this is a great novel with well made world background and charter design which is getting more and more annoying to find these days but the stability of updates has stopped me so to anyone reading this its a good novel just wait a while for the next chapter

6yr

Savage_Watermelon
Savage_WatermelonLv5

Stephen Hawking is that you? ......................................................................................... BTW that would be a nice story: "the transmigration of Stephen Hawking"

6yr
Pleki
PlekiAuthor

If even the author doesn't have the confidence about the stories they wrote why even bother to read it. So i'm just gonna give myself a 5 star review. If you have any criticism about the stories that i write please elaborate and give me some advice. Please give a review and comment about my novel if you interested in it.

6yr
LiquidHatred
LiquidHatredLv11

Good story like it so far just stability is a little questionable. I kinda wish there wasnt a 140 character min. So i see potatos every where

6yr
GreyMalken
GreyMalkenLv14

Ok so...readable but.... in desperate need of some editing and polish. Awkward tenses, run-on sentences, and small walls of text abound. There is potential here, but someone needs to get in there with some elbow grease and red ink to clean it up.

6yr
Padawan1234
Padawan1234Lv5

just found the novel, really well written, read the whole story in one go so far, thanks for your work, really waiting for the next chapters, haven't found a story with such a well designed world in a while

6yr
SpongeSponge
SpongeSpongeLv14

i really like how the author the author explain a lot of stuff sometimes too much but for me it's good compare to other novels who doesn't gave explanation and just booom power up. Slow starts and explain world background clearly. 1 thing i can says the author can improve is the character descriptions. only name, gender, and age is kinda vague for me but maybe it's gave a lot imagination to others reader but for me it's better with some description like hair colour or something. love the characther development wether it's the power up or the personality. 5/5 would read

6yr
Venerable_Soveris
Venerable_SoverisLv1

The novel is great, I don’t know if it was dropped or the author had personal reasons but it’s been 2+ years and I don’t see any notice. I really want to know if the author has gone to another site or has done a different novel.

3yr
Celtend
CeltendLv13

This story is wonderful for the genre, its unique a nd it intriguingly drew me in. The issue I had which dropped the rating is it not updating for three months now, did you start writing on a different platform?

5yr
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