Item: The Era of Evolution
Rating: 3.4
Author: GreyMalken

GreyMalkenLv146yr

2019-01-03 10:58

Ok so...readable but.... in desperate need of some editing and polish. Awkward tenses, run-on sentences, and small walls of text abound. There is potential here, but someone needs to get in there with some elbow grease and red ink to clean it up.

The Era of Evolution

Pleki

3.9

42 Chs

Liked by 1 people

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PlekiAuthor

Thanks for the advice; I will try to improve my grammar as much as I can personally. As for cleaner and editor, I will hold back on hiring them as I really can't afford to spend money on hiring for my hobby. I used to have someone does it for me for free but her novel gets popular so I don't think bugging her to edit mine is a great idea.

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