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Crossfire92Lv126yr
2018-08-28 23:04

So I tried to come back to this story again... It's got a ton of potential but you'll run into a weird problem in it. The author said that ability is limitless time and again in this story. But at chapter 47 the teacher basically tells him that his ability has reached its peak and that the only way to advance if through buying a better cultivation manual. This is complete and utter BS. If origin abilities had limitations then why do they matter? Isn't it better to max out the harder to master human body? So I was pretty upset and went to read other reviews where I discovered that the MC only upgrades his ability through those cards in the future. Really this isn't a terrible idea but its the way the author writes this story that gets on my nerves. Maybe this story is good in it's home language but the translation for this story is beyond terrible. Half the sentences that should have a depth of meaning are pretty blunt and straightforward. Take this sentence: No wonder, with only an E grade talent, you rushed all the way to 200 points. With such a degree of model analysis, I’m afraid that this ability has already reached its peak. So the author does things like this a lot. What's it mean to rush all the way to 200 points? Didn't he spend years refining his ability? This is a Professor who is basically considering his training "rushing". It's these types of sentences that show up all over the place. Things that are hard and require effort or talent are discarded like that. And this is the second thing. His ability has reached its peak? How so? I can think of a few dozen ways model analysis could be used combatively and other ways. 1. analysis of Terran and input of instant defensive equipment. 2. Analysis of Unknown monster and identification of weaknesses instantly 3. Analysis of tracks made and infer the originator via saved models. and so on. He's clearly a tracking/brain type. The key is his ability has to be instant, unblockable, and allow him to fight while using it. What sucks is apparently origin abilities can be blocked. This is a total wth moment. How is a world which uses origin abilities to fight blocked so easily? My second beef with the story starts at chapter 52. We just came from a fight with a repeater. What's completely bizarre in this fight is that the MC with 300 fitness points doesn't easily overpower a guy with 110. This is pretty much the example of combat you'll see from beginning until now. This author does not understand combat.

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ZatanaLv14

My point, i am in ch556 and his ability has improved to the 4th lvl and he just lacks an impetus to get to the 5th one, realization which his model can scan an entire city(if he likes, currently spoiling that he has scanned an entire city before.) And build that city or realize that city.

Crossfire92Lv12

Just because he grows stronger isn't enough reason for me to read a story. I mainly dislike the author's use of language (which could be translator error), as well as the way combat was executed for the first 50 chapters. It isn't really well developed and feels quite forced.

Zatana:My point, i am in ch556 and his ability has improved to the 4th lvl and he just lacks an impetus to get to the 5th one, realization which his model can scan an entire city(if he likes, currently spoiling that he has scanned an entire city before.) And build that city or realize that city.
kumadamLv6

It’s not a “use of language” already. It’s basically what’s make up the world(the novel). The contradictions are just too glaring. It’s one thing for a character’s personality to be like that, since that’ll just add more depth to them. But to have the settings of the world like that too? Just like you’ve mention in the review. It’s a “nice” novel but isn’t enough for me to always tolerate that itch every time I encounter them..

Crossfire92:Just because he grows stronger isn't enough reason for me to read a story. I mainly dislike the author's use of language (which could be translator error), as well as the way combat was executed for the first 50 chapters. It isn't really well developed and feels quite forced.
ShahreLv10

I find it strange too that his teacher can see/feel that MC has 180 points in theoretical knowledge? HOW?!? I get the body strengh part but apart from that it is impossible to know anything else! MCs ability is trash because he don't know how to use it but on a nother person say: Viper it is a B Level ability? And the point system is stupid in itselfe: can you say that any of your knowledge has reached certain points? The universe is infinit and so is knowledge! I know that I know nothing; describs this problem.

AutoChaosLv13

Well the story is just full of plotholes and stupid stuff. Fighting esense: wtf is that? How can u fkng battle like a professional when you just injected some **** into you. Ability points: THEY HAVE NO UTTER SENCE! How even they are calculated?! They have no sence. Just some stupid hit going onn. Fighting technics: Stupidity lvl 10000000. Author has no knowledge about this and he sucks at it. Reaction of 2ndary personages to MC: Stupid AF, REALLY STUPID AF. Guy in a bit over month (idk how much) lvled up his ability from 3.8 to 10.8 wich is OVER FKNG TOP. They are just like: Well he's work payed up at end. Abilities: no utter sence at all. Just some numbers wich are automatically broadcasted for pple to see free.

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Gk786Lv11

One of my favs. Currently up to date at Chapter 551. Glad to see this novel made it here. I'll try and leave a semi-detailed review. Starts out slow and the MC doesn't feel strong, but then boom, MC gets really OP and the story just takes off. Don't abandon it, trust me it gets amazing. I also love the detailed explanations and the effort the author puts into makes everything sound plausible and logical. World-building is amazing. Initially it's very lacking but as more and more details are revealed, you start to see the scope of the world and understand the situation a lot better. Def wait before judging the world-building. Characters are amazing too. Have their own beliefs and personalities. You understand how different characters think and when the focus shifts to a different character, you instantly get an idea of how he's going to act. The villains are great too. Some are kinda one-dimensional but others(like *minor spoilers* a certain head of a family) are actually well-developed characters. MC feels strong but not totally OP and there's some really decent conflicts here. I absolutely adore how he uses his brain to solve everything. You can see his thought process and can foresee his plans and how he experiments with his ability and it makes him feel a lot more relatable. The reader can follow alongside his plans and ideas. Like, one minute you'll be like "what if he does this thing with that thing" and 2 paragraphs later, he realizes that too, and does that thing and it's so satisfying. Honestly there's not much more I can say. Theres very few cliches and deus ex machinas and it never gets boring except for a little bit at the start. Definitely give it a read. I binged it in 2 days and loved it. Don't get discouraged by the slow starting point of the MC. Stick with it and it'll be a really great read.

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