Not sure if you are reading your own story or not, a lot of "tense" mix ups. Past and Present tense in the same sentence makes it aggravating to read in a relaxed and carefree manner. Overall it's a good basic story structure, I would recommend either re-reading your chapters to ensure they flow well together and that you aren't mixing up your "tenses" or have another person read through your chapters before posting to do this for you. The PoV is really consistent which is great compared to a lot of other original stories on this site, so thank you! Just try and read your chapters a few times out load before you post them as final edits, it will help you catch most, if not all, the smaller errors and putting it into a word processor should help catch the rest. Also, "a live" is not the same as "alive".
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