It's shameless of me to 1 star this work but as a reader of WN I'm biased. I feel like this story can be compared to a roller coaster. There might be ups and downs from what I can see but idk. But im hoping it'll be up at most of the times. As a reader I promise to give out the best review I can. Seeing as this is his first serious work as you can see from all his other dropped work. I hope he don't plan to drop this anytime as I can see him have amazing things to do with this novel. This is so sad, Alexa play despacito 7

Pretty good so far! Not a bad read to waste some time, pacing is good, wish they would describe the outside world/clothing/food a bit more but its only been 2 chapters.

How come an assassin knows reincarnation never mentioned he read novels movies or any of that ,the how? Author why did you need to put "that little girl" to the family and why a girl it is always a girl in a novel there are no boys cause if he really loved "old girl in previous world" he wouldn't be swayed by the "little girl" and is he a pedophile cause I think a lot of people in a cultivation world are orphans it did not show cause of weak/no talent . And I want to know why the "little girl's parents " abandoned her if she has a really talent and don't say they are poor cause they could have betrothed the "little girl" or put her in an orphanage Just here to get exp's don't bother reading this I just made it to get exp's Yes road to 775 words

Not sure if you are reading your own story or not, a lot of "tense" mix ups. Past and Present tense in the same sentence makes it aggravating to read in a relaxed and carefree manner. Overall it's a good basic story structure, I would recommend either re-reading your chapters to ensure they flow well together and that you aren't mixing up your "tenses" or have another person read through your chapters before posting to do this for you. The PoV is really consistent which is great compared to a lot of other original stories on this site, so thank you! Just try and read your chapters a few times out load before you post them as final edits, it will help you catch most, if not all, the smaller errors and putting it into a word processor should help catch the rest. Also, "a live" is not the same as "alive".

Poorly plotted out characters that are either bad ass one second or dumb as a door nail the next 1 star The english was understandable but it hurt to read it and was badly written 2 stars World backround was not plotted out well same as the characters 1 star Plot line was semi usable until it met a author who doesnt flesh out any of the story 2 stars In all 1 star rateing and this isnt the worst rateing ever... iv seen worse novels and that is saying something... (i have a major issue with how dim minded the mc clearly is and how the mcs name from one world and the father of mc after reincarnated has nearly the same name as the mc) to me these small issues show bigger flaws the story wasnt plotted out properly and was clearly rushed to be posted and it doesnt have a editior to fix the numerous spelling errors and sentence hang ups (Please understand im actually being kind in this review some of my other ones with even worse spelling errors make me blow my top off and i lack the ability to function in my mental anguish and inner screaming at the many issues i see in the original novels... some some so bad it makes all the issues in this one near nothing )

The development of the story is quite good. Though it's not yet complete but you can feel the actions and thrilled of the story. The author can portray the motif of the character and it's role to make their lives full with tremendous activity. The character show the advantage of being on top and how to make it sustainable in a certain period of time. The character should take part of it's role to be ahead from the others. In real life the main character portray that to excel in these life competition you should be ahead from what others are thinking...

Nice chapter. Keep up the good work. Full of thrill and actions. Character is the best also the supporting characters. More action and fighting's on the chapter

The synopsis is right on point... shocker! To all out there, I highly recommend this novel. There are a few character inconsistencies for a reborn assassin and a lot of grammar and spell errors that can be anoying. This things, they prevent the reader from fully enjoying and appreciating the story for what it is. If you can ignore those few things, you will find a good novel with a solid plot that has great potential for an epic adventure. Lets hope for the best.

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