The characters personality, skills, power , and intelligence doesn’t even match up on the background you gave him. Add to the fact that you severely NERF him. The beggining chapters could be compiled as an entire chapter. Too much info dump at the beginning. The MC could have learn some of those things on his journey. The grammar is superb and the writing is good. The only real problem is how you represent your MC. Think of how a real battle hardened assassin would act. His background is a huge joke.
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Glad I'm not the only one that though this... read to 30ish to try and give it a chance, but I really can't continue. The synopsis and beginning make it seem like you're getting a badass hitman going to a lit rpg world to be even more badass, yet you get a nerfed to oblivion MC, and an almost Japanese-mosque isekai comedy story. Completely not what I though I was getting into with the synopsis and first ten or so chapters. Not gonna give a rating as this is mainly just this not being along what I thought it initially would be, if I were to though, it'd probably be the same as OP just because your grammar is superb, something seldomly seen lately.
Japanese-esque^ changed after I posted somehow.. weird
I feel the info dump is something not seen in most books and if not given properly at the beginning or throughout the story it causes plot holes or weird parts that don’t match up in a story, I’ve read it up to its most recent and while yes there is a lot of plot information being dumped on the reader it wasn’t too bad at all and is a very good read
glad i wasn't the only one felt like you either, i completely disregarded the criticism and read it anyway once i found out that the mc got nerfed even till the point where his 🍆 shrunk i had a bad feeling there but i still read on till the next chapter and it was full of bad comedy 👎🏼 completely opposite of what i was thinking it was going to be, what hitman gets bit in the ass by rabbits ??? he could have basically just done what ever one else does " game freak gets transmigrated to a world of magic with a system watch as he journeys to become strong " 😑😑😑😑
BloodCleaver:Glad I'm not the only one that though this... read to 30ish to try and give it a chance, but I really can't continue. The synopsis and beginning make it seem like you're getting a badass hitman going to a lit rpg world to be even more badass, yet you get a nerfed to oblivion MC, and an almost Japanese-mosque isekai comedy story. Completely not what I though I was getting into with the synopsis and first ten or so chapters. Not gonna give a rating as this is mainly just this not being along what I thought it initially would be, if I were to though, it'd probably be the same as OP just because your grammar is superb, something seldomly seen lately.
Well 3.5 star is still very generous
