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GRoy
GRoyLv136yr
2018-06-29 21:59

Ok bro. I just finished reading first 72ch. Italiano?? :) good for you. I wish to see the end of this novel, but i really think you will never finish. Why? --- the pace of the novel is at 🐌 speed. Very, very slow. --- in first 70ch nothing much happened. In this style, he will finish the first planet in....1000ch? --- the story will take place on 9 planets, so , we should expect about 9000ch ? U're ambitiously, i like it. But try to stay true. --- the problem is that you give too much details , for everything, and you have many "empty" chapters. This is what u need to work off. The novel has a unique flavor, and i like it very much. I love the MC, the world, the monsters. Probably, like many others, you dream to be a good author. But it is not easy. And all of them started with short novels, 400-500-700ch. This is what you need to look for, the end goal, to finish this story. If you can not finish it, you will go to the other side, the side where are a lot of authors who gone in hiatus, and almost nobody will read another novel of them. Back to topic, is a good story, a nice flavor, finally i see the diference between 10 Int and 1000 Int. Not just another stat thrown there. Ok. Make a plan for the novel. A plan where you actually see the final product. Try to limit the details, the explanations , i think everyone knows what the **** is "heal" and "blink". It is not the first time when we see it.Don't try to make a long novel. U need a fan base. Fan base are made with finished novels. I hope you will read this 😁 . I really like your work. Sorry for my english, but i hope that u got my message. ✌🏻

Level-Up Hitman

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4.3
101 Chs

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MRF7760
MRF7760Lv6

👍🏻...good explanation

6yr
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Anonymous03
Anonymous03Lv4

Author might actually raise the pace after one planet because other stories with floor have like 10 episodes for floor 1 and few on the next floors although you make a good point.

6yr
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anHilla
anHillaLv6

My first time seeing such well built, dedidacted, and loving talk to the author. 👍 You just made me not all hope is lost. Have a nice day there Sir.

6yr
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DaoistCrazy1122
DaoistCrazy1122Lv13

I hope he finishes the novel

6yr
SilentMild
SilentMildLv6

Hi GRoy, can I pls ask for your constructive criticism for my small project. Hoping to hear some thoughts from you in the comments section. Lovelots! ***.webnovel.com/book/12961364405159105/The-Legendary-Demon-Hunter

5yr
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CestMoi
CestMoiLv14

The characters personality, skills, power , and intelligence doesn’t even match up on the background you gave him. Add to the fact that you severely NERF him. The beggining chapters could be compiled as an entire chapter. Too much info dump at the beginning. The MC could have learn some of those things on his journey. The grammar is superb and the writing is good. The only real problem is how you represent your MC. Think of how a real battle hardened assassin would act. His background is a huge joke.

6yr

Dark_Xavy
Dark_XavyLv5

WoW just WoW.. The idea behind this story is very well brought, like the background and plot alike.. And I also like the story so far and its interesting to know where his limit is and what's his limit.. And to also know who will be his allies or enemies.. Especially his Waifu or Waifus.. So I will stick to the story and find out, what's in store for me...

6yr
dragonmage124
dragonmage124Lv5

Reveal spoiler

6yr
Immortal_Potato
Immortal_PotatoLv6

---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- (1st Review) I like it. Maybe you will. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

6yr
Quiescent_Rumble
Quiescent_RumbleLv4

I stopped reading three books before this one. They had an interesting idea and I wanted to like them. I did not. This one I read in one go. It is well written, the story is interesting and I want more of it. The beginning is different than the rest, so don't be afraid of the real book because of the weird way of writing at the start of the book. This is fun to read. I like overpowered. And NO harem! Yeah! Not even some stupid other person who follows him forever. He is alone most of the time and and he is cool! 2xYeah! About the stars... first I though, this is a much better system than many others, if I don't know about one category, I don't have to give stars. This is not true :-( You have to give stars for every category. So I gave 4 stars for "Stability of Updates" but I have no idea and don't care about it. I read it in one go until the leaving of the first area. So how would I know?

6yr
Mr_Ethical
Mr_EthicalLv5

the movie is great. the character development is quite okay but my problem is the UPDATE!!! what happened? are you still alive? don't let your readers hanging 😑😑

6yr
Dark_cloud47
Dark_cloud47Lv6

Probably dead now. All the good original novels just die out after sometime. Like The book of the universe. The author isn’t even putting up a notice or anything.

6yr
kukulkhan
kukulkhanLv5

Good work, keep it up! Don't be disappointed by negative comments, or pace of novel , you're doing a fine job. There are many sham systems out here, which in the end were old men hidden under disguise of system, and helping the MC time to time, bro don't do that, that's ****, pure ****... As any logical, rational person will doubt such system(there's a novel in which MC on further increasing power dissolves the system as he doubts its reason) creating a flaw most novels, you've corrected it here... That's cool... Keep em releasin

6yr
SORCERERSUPREME_7
SORCERERSUPREME_7Lv2

Fucking so....... So...... Slow story line. I read 50 chapters he is not even level 2 not intersting... It was nice only till 5th chapter....................,.............. .......................

5yr
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