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DragonSlayerz_ZmajLv44yr
2021-02-21 18:31

The story was well laid out, although the story suddenly felt rushed in the end. The characters' personalities and how they were written was very good, loved it. I wasn't there when it was written, so I can't say anything about the upload schedule. The world itself, although explained, wasn't explored; however, seeing as it wasn't that relevant to the plot, it makes sense. Last, the writing quality: had a lot of typos, occasionally used a word incorrectly, and the way the reader sees the world (through the thoughts of the mc) was sometimes confusing and not satisfying to read. It needed clear separation between his thoughts and observations of the world. For my feelings on if the story is worth it to read, if you don't mind a quick read and aren't looking for a masterpiece, it's a good read. The biggest problem with the story is the sudden change in the progression, which abandoned everything the MC was doing and forcefully hastened the ending. This ruined the ending and made it feel not real. All the buildup was removed and made it seem like just another unimportant battle. Aaaand~ that's my review.

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KingRaiza
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I think I saw the author explain somewhere else that it was supposed to end earlier and thats why the ending was rushed. If I remember right

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