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Shade11224
Shade11224Lv56yr
2018-07-03 00:37

Invest in a grammar checker, like Word or something it would improve the flow considerably because currently it feels jumbled up and hard to read. Story doesn’t seem bad though.

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Shade11224
Shade11224Lv5

I tend to try to be extremely critical when it comes to the stars because the review system seems to be skewed in the fact that everyone who leaves a review always gives 5 stars if they like it a little rather than being realistic, don’t worry it won’t really affect your rating.

fkjgfkf
fkjgfkfLv2

take it as an incentive author, it really isn't hard to get something to check for grammar mistakes (which your novel is riddled with and is dreadfully painful to read no matter how good the story itself might be)

Innovation
InnovationAuthor

Yeah, i know mb for the little hate speech, got 2 game versus techies, and then saw your comment

Shade11224:I tend to try to be extremely critical when it comes to the stars because the review system seems to be skewed in the fact that everyone who leaves a review always gives 5 stars if they like it a little rather than being realistic, don’t worry it won’t really affect your rating.
Innovation
InnovationAuthor

Ok so give me a name please. Because in Microsoft Word, my chapters are good.

fkjgfkf:take it as an incentive author, it really isn't hard to get something to check for grammar mistakes (which your novel is riddled with and is dreadfully painful to read no matter how good the story itself might be)
Shade11224
Shade11224Lv5

Grammarly it’s really good and even checks for plagiarism I think

Innovation
InnovationAuthor

What is the plagiarism you are talking about? Me saying name that i shouldn't have? Or the name of a proofreader?

Shade11224:Grammarly it’s really good and even checks for plagiarism I think
Shade11224
Shade11224Lv5

Lol no it’s just when you quote someone or steal excerpts from articles or other sources online without properly quoting them and I don’t think you have plagiarized anything it was just a cool feature of it lol. It’s mainly for just checking your grammar, punctuation and spelling.

Chunchunmaru_sama
Chunchunmaru_samaLv6

Something just pierced my heart when i saw "no-harem" on the tags😫😫

choc014
choc014Lv11

Grammarly is a good choice. I was about to suggest it. Hehehe.

Shade11224:Lol no it’s just when you quote someone or steal excerpts from articles or other sources online without properly quoting them and I don’t think you have plagiarized anything it was just a cool feature of it lol. It’s mainly for just checking your grammar, punctuation and spelling.
FilledWithHope
FilledWithHopeLv5

The book is said to be in editing now.

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