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GraveWalker
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2018-08-07 06:39

Reading this makes me sick. The writing is bad, the main character isn't really smart as the author makes him out to be. The gods are stupid and act like teenagers, how strong were they to fight a lich? Lol how does a 10-15 centimeter rat eat an entire body of a lich?

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Innovation
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Writing is my weak point i agree on that, especially the first volume, it is a nightmare. But no editors yet. MC is not smart, never was, and never will be. He is just logical and a coward. But he is extremely aware about conventions and laws, meaning he can still deduct a lot of things from a discussion. Gods are made that way, because one of them is truly a stupid, hot blooded, but gorgeous goddess. How strong the adventurers are or how weak is that lich? Chapter 7. Lich doesn't have that much of flesh surroundings the bones, compared to a normal human body, so, in a few hours, a rat without the concept of stomach and limit can eat it. But i didn't described enough the lich, my bad.

GraveWalker
GraveWalkerLv4

Sorry ☹️

Innovation:Writing is my weak point i agree on that, especially the first volume, it is a nightmare. But no editors yet. MC is not smart, never was, and never will be. He is just logical and a coward. But he is extremely aware about conventions and laws, meaning he can still deduct a lot of things from a discussion. Gods are made that way, because one of them is truly a stupid, hot blooded, but gorgeous goddess. How strong the adventurers are or how weak is that lich? Chapter 7. Lich doesn't have that much of flesh surroundings the bones, compared to a normal human body, so, in a few hours, a rat without the concept of stomach and limit can eat it. But i didn't described enough the lich, my bad.
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