Ouch my eyes. The plot itself is barely followable and is just a mashup of tropes, while the writing itself is nigh incomprehensible due to the lack of grammar and structure. I can easily get the gist of what is going on due to the 1-D nature of the characters, but that doesn't forgive any of the egregious flaws.
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Have to admit of the poor grammar. Thank you for receiving your first Review in this sites.
Thank you! This Rabbink had waited for your reviews. Gwahahaha. This showed my novels had become popular. For other readers, feels free to check whether the review is true or false. This Rabbink had to admit early chapter is FULL of wall of text as have been said in Author's Introduction which made the story confusing. Sorry. Some critics often said the opposite. While I admit the structure lacking, but my sentences is ******. Since I use a grammar tools to ensure my novels could be read by 3rd grader, so avoiding long and complex sentences. This is a critic given to me by a real critics. I was asked to add more 'adjective' to my story and make the sentences danced more.
i like the concept. My recommendation would be to edit for clarity.
