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readerofstories
readerofstoriesLv46yr
2018-09-22 17:28

Ouch my eyes. The plot itself is barely followable and is just a mashup of tropes, while the writing itself is nigh incomprehensible due to the lack of grammar and structure. I can easily get the gist of what is going on due to the 1-D nature of the characters, but that doesn't forgive any of the egregious flaws.

Endless Universes - Young Master Path - The 1368th

MasterRabbink
3.7
133 Chs

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MasterRabbink
MasterRabbinkAuthor

Have to admit of the poor grammar. Thank you for receiving your first Review in this sites.

6yr
MasterRabbink
MasterRabbinkAuthor

Thank you! This Rabbink had waited for your reviews. Gwahahaha. This showed my novels had become popular. For other readers, feels free to check whether the review is true or false. This Rabbink had to admit early chapter is FULL of wall of text as have been said in Author's Introduction which made the story confusing. Sorry. Some critics often said the opposite. While I admit the structure lacking, but my sentences is ******. Since I use a grammar tools to ensure my novels could be read by 3rd grader, so avoiding long and complex sentences. This is a critic given to me by a real critics. I was asked to add more 'adjective' to my story and make the sentences danced more.

6yr
readerofstories
readerofstoriesLv4

i like the concept. My recommendation would be to edit for clarity.

6yr
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TrevonMcArthur
TrevonMcArthurLv4

Being forced by Master Rabbink to promote my own story!!! Master Rabbink, this will get me some female fans, right? Hahaha. What is this review should not be less than 140 characters? There is only 1 character needed. The number 1 young master from Bluestar. Yours truly Trevon McArthur.

6yr

TrevonMcArthur
TrevonMcArthurLv4

Hahahaha. This feels strange reading your own story. The author is ugly and annoying. Main Character is very handsome. Harem Please!!! Upvote for Harem! I want a very big Harem! Low star until Master Rabbink gives easier missions. This Rabbink is too ********.

6yr
PineHeinKyaw
PineHeinKyawLv10

i just read synopsis and this is the longest synopsis i have ever read in my life and one of the most interesting one and this synopsis make me read this novel immediately. i really want novel for young master and this is the really good one... more chapter plz!!

6yr
MasterRabbink
MasterRabbinkAuthor

I couldn't believe this. My main character wrote a bad review for his story. He only gave 5 star for Character Development. This Rabbink needs to shamelessly write the standard 5 stars review to balance the score. I promise never dropped this novel.

6yr
Kimochi_Warui
Kimochi_WaruiLv4

What a shameless Author you are... to Vote ur own Webnovel hahah but I like it.. >.< haist Qidian.. xD please delete the 140 words14140 words0 words140 words140 words

6yr
EternalGrowth
EternalGrowthLv5

Well, i wish you dont drop it, event if this story is slow paced, keep working for it, i will support you, thanks for your hard work if you read this, please dont drop it

6yr
Arania
AraniaLv5

So this is novel isn’t really a system novel, but the MC has a system like, system thing from his master which is the author of this novel. The master is extremely op and is a rabbink. Now I know you guys don’t know what a rabbink is (shame on you) but you just have to look at the authors profile picture to get a look at what it is. Some aspects of the real world are included into the novel, such as a tablet which has the Webnovel app and also an app which I would assume is Playboy. The MC is even allowed to use the tablet to read webnovels. Honestly I don’t really see why this novel isn’t more popular. Probably because this type of writing is rare and people aren’t willing to give it a try. All the novels where the MC are weak in the beginning, but they are a genius, but they are poor, but they work hard to the top, with cultivation are honestly getting so tepetitive and boring, it gets hard to read. This provides a break from the norm. If I had to recommend an original it would be this. Best original webnovel on this whole platform imo. Definitely more I want to say, but I I’m mad tired. Mass release plz, just 40 chapters is all I want.

6yr
MasterRabbink
MasterRabbinkAuthor

Reveal spoiler

6yr
KingLique95
KingLique95Lv5

The MC does not resemble any Young Master of any Qidian or Wuxia Novel I've read soo Far From Being excited to disappointed People will alwayz have different tastes But why Give the MC who already has enough Talent?? A God System A God (literally) Yet he can't even level up or do any MeaningFul Young Master things When has there ever been a Virgin Notorious Young Master who is known for Visiting brothels??😐 You show pipo with Cultivation Speed 90+ yet 50chaps in they haven't even begun Cultivating when ey have the technique.... The MC is the 1st to know abwt a Beast Tide yet he doesn't even prepare for Anything All the Young Masters in any Novel have ambition n do all to make sure THEIR AMBITION IS fulfilled YEt this Young Master does nothing With all his talents and advantages still stuck on 1 level WHATS his Difference frm Normal Cultivators??? Why give him a System even The God?? Better to remove it all As a Fellow Reader do Check system Novels like USS n TSS even MP and see how they handle their MCs

6yr
Dontlookdown
DontlookdownLv11

Wow... a truly spoiled and shameless mc... it matches well with the author... bwahahahahahahHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

6yr
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