Item: Shinobi system in elemental nation
Rating: 1.4
Author: WhiteSalt

WhiteSaltLv56yr

2018-06-14 14:43

Uhh there's always ppl think it's easier writing fan-fic rather than their original story, and there's also ppl who write fan-fic as it's tend to be more popular with one reason or other. My only input for you is that improve your writing, it doesn't matter what you write original/fan-fic as long as your writing's good, i don't want to like kill ppl drive for writing, but it's good to accept criticism and learn from it.

Shinobi system in elemental nation

Fugaku

3.6

81 Chs

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soulrulerLv6

What are you guys on about this not being on the timeline and s**t this is a fanfic so it’s up to the Author to decide what happens it’s boring if we have all naruto fanfic the same. This is unique novel so fu** off if you don’t like don’t read.

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anotherfanLv4

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KatsuhitoLv4

wtf is going on is this some wet dream of 8 yo kid or what? i actually got hurt reading this if you wanna torture yourself then this is best choice nothing makes sense in this fanfic starting with characters its supposed to be in naruto world with naruto characters how come sasuke wanted to join some fu**ing race? same goes for neji why would we want to team up with lee AND hinata?? wtf and this is supposed to be in time when they were in academy ????? dude this is some next level sh*t right here.

6yr

GhostfaceLv5

Love the idea but you've totally butchered the timeline. I'm pretty sure Naruto was born after the 3rd World War during a time of peace. Unless this is an alternate timeline where he was born early.

6yr

AzureMattLv11

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GhostfaceLv5

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thecreedLv5

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KnightShade420Lv13

Honestly I was excited to read the story based on the summary but I think the author should go back and re read or treat her the naruto series. He had many things in their that was weird and felt like someone who never watched naruto wrote about it. First of all the third great Shinobi war was between all five great nations not just stone and leaf. And where did this sixth great nation came about. Naruto was supposed to have the most chakra out everyone his age by a huge margin but in this story Sasuke is equivalent. Sasuke was a brooding genius he would not make someone his brother because that person was stronger than them. He might have after finding out about sharingan but not before. Sasuke was from a great clan he was not in need of money so the whole concept of him and naruto bonding because of the race thing made drop the story right there. Plus change some of the dialogue intro Japanese especially brother into niichan.

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cheil4Lv10

More ...please.jxjdbdjdhdjdhdusjshsdhdhdudhdjdjdbdbdjdjdkxjxhdhdjdhdbdbxhxjxixixihxhdsjisosidhxhdjdjjdhddhdjdjdhdhjddjdidjdhdhhdjdjdjdjdjdidjdjdbdbdjjdidkdjdhdhdhdjdjdjjdjdjdjdididididiid

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Quiescent_RumbleLv4

The writing is very bad. It is hard to want to read it. What is happening is not interesting. And to "quote" Gretel: Who the **** is Naruto? It is not that I don't know who he is, but really, him again? I really don't get it why anyone likes him anyway, so fan fiction around him... I don't get even less. Bad fan fiction...let's not talk about it. I really can't stand this book. It is really shameful to say something like that, when I can't do better, and yes, I can not do better. But I don't like this book. Sorry.

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