Honestly I was excited to read the story based on the summary but I think the author should go back and re read or treat her the naruto series. He had many things in their that was weird and felt like someone who never watched naruto wrote about it. First of all the third great Shinobi war was between all five great nations not just stone and leaf. And where did this sixth great nation came about. Naruto was supposed to have the most chakra out everyone his age by a huge margin but in this story Sasuke is equivalent. Sasuke was a brooding genius he would not make someone his brother because that person was stronger than them. He might have after finding out about sharingan but not before. Sasuke was from a great clan he was not in need of money so the whole concept of him and naruto bonding because of the race thing made drop the story right there. Plus change some of the dialogue intro Japanese especially brother into niichan.
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yeah totaly butchered the timeline six great nation ? there is only 5 hidden mist,stone,cloud,leaf, and metal as for the other villages its either minor or not big and strong enough to become a great nation AND FOR FCKKK SAKE NARUTO CHAKRA CAME FROM BEING THE JINCHURIKI OF KYUUBI AND YOUR TELLING ME SASUKE IS THE SAME well i will admit sasuke is a very talented ninja but in terms of chakra capacity not even killer bee has the same chakra as naruto at that time and just so you know KILLER BEE IS KAGE LEVEL like the revierwer above I SUGGEST THE AUTHOR THAT YOU REREAD AND REWATCH THE MANGA AND ANIME this is like being tortured for us naruto fans I WOULD HOPE YOU KINDLY TAKE OUR ADVICE THOUGH HARSH BECAUSE THIS KIND OF NOVELS ARE EITHER DROPPED OR AXED
and ill just add im not being harsh cause i hate the novel i love all naruto fanfic but this one is just that painful to look at the very least i hope that you at the very based your characters background story to the proper one made in naruto like sasuke doesnt have the same chakra amount as naruto
Bunch of morons this has nothing to do with the naruto series its only borrowing the concept just how there are different wuxia xianxia novels out there that do not relate to one another IDIOTS FORGET NARUTO... IF YOU WANT ANOTHER NARUTO THEN GO F.N. READ A SPIN OFF OR DOUJINSHI CAUSE THIS AINT ONE!!!!!
I felt like you had a point but then you pulled out that niichan bull****, your credibility no longer existd
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So your argument doesn’t make sense in this scenario. Yes this isn’t supposed to be a carbon copy of naruto in fact the more he alters the events the better but there has to be a reason behind it. He gives no backstory as to why he just took out 10 years out of the series. In fact there’s no backstory at all he expects us to know everything which I except but you can’t skip out on major details because it’s a naruto fanfic and then leave glaring plot holes with no explanation and say it’s his own world and not a carbon copy. If you want to make the world yours build your story don’t just borrow it and change it as you please. Use the narutoverse as your foundation but you yourself have to build it up to whatever masterpiece you hope it to be.
