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Willox
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2018-07-11 07:56

Sorry can't bring my self to give anything better. The mc confused me, he goes around wanting to prank voldermort. To going to, hum I need a magic teacher, hey lets pick the most unstable psycho in the harry potter universe as my teacher, yeah nothing can go bad oh and lets reveals all his weakness so that i have no back up plan, when he'll stab me in the back. I still don't understand his plan it seem pretty made up along the way, like yes lets infect harry with vampire blood and leave a note. Dude what the hell, harry plot armor will crush you for this. Sigh, anywho if you like harry potter or vampire fanfiction give this a try the idea is interesting, and other people seem to like it so it not all bad. As for me the mc gave a headache, on his half bakeness, also nothing is explaine no inner monologue to explaine his erratic choices.

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Thanks for the honest review, I'll try my best to improve my writing.

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