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DKQ
DKQLv136yr
2018-05-27 08:33

A great piece of work that is fast-paced which I love. The Idle system can be considered Unique compared to other systems out while it 'Updates' itself regularly leading to better quality in the future. As this is an original, I am happy to say it is one of the best if not the best on this site.

The Idle System

Pegaz
4.1
13 Chs

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Pegaz
PegazAuthor

Thanks for the review xD

6yr
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FakeFe
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It's complicated yet good novel. So, Author plays Idling to Rule Gods eh? The Idle System is likely 80% same as the game system in it. Cheers!

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Silkjackel
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Fleeting_Cloud
Fleeting_CloudLv11

Reveal spoiler

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Pegaz
PegazAuthor

Currently there's a little bug that shows some chapter out of order but I assure you that it's client side. The chapters are properly placed. If you refresh the browser it should work eventually, if not then please wait till it's fixed.

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Unoz
UnozLv5

Good story, i like it. Vote vote vote. Cursed 140 characters, cursed 140 characters, cursed 140 characters, cursed 140 characters, cursed 140 characters

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Seronis
SeronisLv5

Story wasnt bad at all. Until author ran out of ideas, put up some donation links, got money, and disappeared. Story is incomplete and abandoned after a cash grab that didnt even have the respect to use the Power Stone system of the site he was using to host.

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HelloItMee
HelloItMeeLv5

YOU NEED TO READ IT ITS FAST PACED ITS GOOD ITS SYSTEM ITS OP MC ITS KILLING BAD GUYS ITS WORLD TRAVELLERS ITS ALSO OTHER WORLD TRAVELLERS ITS IMMORTALITY ITS THE DAO ITS VERY NICE

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TomRiffle101
TomRiffle101Lv11

Reveal spoiler

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LonelySago
LonelySagoLv12

I'm loving the story so far.. The MC isn't dumb, and also the residents of the world. As for the technicalities.. I'm not that proficient in grammar so i'll skip it. Good story, please continue the good work! Support +1 👍🏽

6yr
Fatality
FatalityLv5

This story has a lot of potential, but unfortunately the subpar writing is really letting it down. Before accusing me of hating this story, allow me to explain. Firstly, the author capitalizes too much. Any word that is not a name nor the first word of a sentence does not have to be capitalized, unless it's a proper noun. – e.g. a Christian church, Canadian whisky, a Shakespearean sonnet. Secondly, there are way too many plot holes in the story with several flaws in logic. I would also recommend that if you were to create a system based on numbers, the least you could do is to make sure your calculations are correct, as there are quite a few obvious mistakes I won't point out. Several terms were also used incorrectly. For example, instead of "artery system", you should have used "circulatory system". I understand that you may not be aware that you have been using incorrect terms but it's essential for good storytelling. I will not elaborate further on this issue, as its something that you have to figure out on your own. I would suggest reading English published books that have been professionally edited; it will be helpful in improving your grammar and vocabulary. I have also noticed that you made several mistakes with the usage of past tense, present tense, singluar and plural verbs. I might be coming off as nitpicky but as the saying goes, "God is in the detail". Bad grammar can cause descriptions to appear strange to readers and interrupt the story flow, as they will have to go back several paragraphs to make sense of what is happening. I hope the author will notice this review and improve on his writing, as the theme of this story has too much potential to be wasted. I wrote this review with the hope that 'original stories' in our community will gain more exposure and the *******ish writing will be in the future, not so *******ish.

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