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FakeFe
FakeFeLv26yr
2018-05-25 12:04

It's complicated yet good novel. So, Author plays Idling to Rule Gods eh? The Idle System is likely 80% same as the game system in it. Cheers!

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Pegaz
PegazAuthor

The Idlers part was inspired by that game yes :P

HelloItMee
HelloItMeeLv5

I have 500 hours on that game

SOLXP
SOLXPLv3

what is that game ? pc or android

PaidThePrice
PaidThePriceLv11

Pc

Phobes
PhobesLv6

its on android too

Qwazi
QwaziLv5

Not on I tunes 😭

VoidListener
VoidListenerLv3

Its on kongragate,but very long and slow game i recommend realm grinders best idle game there is i guess

TheUnluckyPhantom
TheUnluckyPhantomLv5

Sounds interesting

Waqi
WaqiLv3

Yeah! I was pretty surprised aswell.

ShadowKiller078
ShadowKiller078Lv11

i have 3377 hours on that game

HelloItMee:I have 500 hours on that game
HelloItMee
HelloItMeeLv5

I bow down in respects to you please add me on steam

ShadowKiller078:i have 3377 hours on that game
ShadowKiller078
ShadowKiller078Lv11

steam name?

HelloItMee:I bow down in respects to you please add me on steam
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This story has a lot of potential, but unfortunately the subpar writing is really letting it down. Before accusing me of hating this story, allow me to explain. Firstly, the author capitalizes too much. Any word that is not a name nor the first word of a sentence does not have to be capitalized, unless it's a proper noun. – e.g. a Christian church, Canadian whisky, a Shakespearean sonnet. Secondly, there are way too many plot holes in the story with several flaws in logic. I would also recommend that if you were to create a system based on numbers, the least you could do is to make sure your calculations are correct, as there are quite a few obvious mistakes I won't point out. Several terms were also used incorrectly. For example, instead of "artery system", you should have used "circulatory system". I understand that you may not be aware that you have been using incorrect terms but it's essential for good storytelling. I will not elaborate further on this issue, as its something that you have to figure out on your own. I would suggest reading English published books that have been professionally edited; it will be helpful in improving your grammar and vocabulary. I have also noticed that you made several mistakes with the usage of past tense, present tense, singluar and plural verbs. I might be coming off as nitpicky but as the saying goes, "God is in the detail". Bad grammar can cause descriptions to appear strange to readers and interrupt the story flow, as they will have to go back several paragraphs to make sense of what is happening. I hope the author will notice this review and improve on his writing, as the theme of this story has too much potential to be wasted. I wrote this review with the hope that 'original stories' in our community will gain more exposure and the *******ish writing will be in the future, not so *******ish.

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