Hi author here, till chapter 9 I will try to lay down the foundation for mc and after that I will start to develop character and world. Please try and bear with the writing. As for Indian characters, i am an indian and would like to promote the culture of India( I really dont have much knowledge of chinese culture) thank you, and appreciate you guy's viewership.
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do Aarav is dead? then Qin Wunfa soul transmigrated into Aarav's corpse? or they're same soul?
They are the same soul 1) Aarav died at the age of 66 and became qin wufa 2) Qin wufa/Aarav's soul (a.k.a the main soul came back to Aarav by going into past and breakinv the law of samsara.
hmm it's same with ATG? thanks for answer!~
glad I could help
Nice one finally Indians are also getting into this, story has nice start speed up the all votes are for u
Really bad English. I won't even read the chapters when there are so many mistakes in the synopsis.
+1 to Positive Lullaby bout the synopsis, but about the bad english, i don't mind it. Just practice and improve grammatically. I've read upto ch13 and a piece of advice for you, the synopsis should be more like this: "Qin Wufa, a Supreme cultivator has the Ultimate Goal of creating a SYSTEM, and after his long wait of 20 million years he succeeded.....? Yes, he did create the SYSTEM but something went wrong and he died thinking "was it all wasted? His 20 million years worth of effort?" But with a twist of fate, he wakes up as his past life named Aarav and with him a soul bound system. Realizing this, he now sets new goals to achieve, greater compared to his future self's achievement." Goodluck with this story.
Even the title is wrong. Thats what happens when people who don't know English try to write.
Its not entirely wrong if i say so myself. He (the MC) did create a system then died because of it, only to be reborn to his past life.
Also, glad to speak to one of the members of Exp sect.
I mean wrong grammatically. You dont capitalize three or less letter words. So the Of should be of.
Also, there needs to be 'the' before system creator, since it is a creator and not creation.
Oh.. yeah, it give that vibe. Haha. But every start up story has this things. I chose to give it chance. And i'm enjoying it for now.. even though there's a lot of work needed. I just note to myself that the author is not a native english speaker and still needs practice.
The author needs to take our discussion into acount. Cause, even though this is just basic things. Its detrimental in the immersion of readers. It causes a buffer to the reader to correct the grammar to understand thoroughly the plot. Thats why experienced writer's reittirate, reittirate & reittirate.
thank you for the valuable advices, its not that i don't want to see the discussions, but i can't. My parents hardly give me any devices as it is time of exams. I will improve my grammatical mistakes
thank you for your correction. I will try and improve. But other than that, please do tell what u think about the novel till now. Once again, i really appreciate the help
You're welcome, & K.I.U.
what's K.I.U, pardon my incompetence
Keep it up
Btw, how did you became an author in this platform? I don't see any options in the app on where to post a writing.
