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Broughtwaorld2
Broughtwaorld2Author6yr
2018-07-27 22:25

hi author here. Sorry for such a mess up. I assure you this story is even better than last time. please do support me by reading this again as i commit myself to atleast 1 chap update

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Supremeorb
SupremeorbLv11

Dude, I'm just upset that I waiting for months for an chapter then bam we have less :P ... i will start your new one... when i'm a bit less upset :P

Supremeorb
SupremeorbLv11

Oh maybe just lemme know when the couple starts fooling around (sexually), I will start then, I think i'm just more upset the romance is gone and pls no harem or different female lead... hopefully not.

Broughtwaorld2
Broughtwaorld2Author

np

Supremeorb:Oh maybe just lemme know when the couple starts fooling around (sexually), I will start then, I think i'm just more upset the romance is gone and pls no harem or different female lead... hopefully not.
Supreme_Leader
Supreme_LeaderLv12

Glad you're back. I hope you keep updating regularly.

Broughtwaorld2
Broughtwaorld2Author

Yes sir

Supreme_Leader:Glad you're back. I hope you keep updating regularly.
RexAdewale34
RexAdewale34Lv1

The fact you wrote something others couldnt write makes you a god in the heart.

Broughtwaorld2
Broughtwaorld2Author

Thanks man

RexAdewale34:The fact you wrote something others couldnt write makes you a god in the heart.
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Skully_
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**Brutal Mode** Engaged Starting a story is easy! Just drown the reader in so much info dumping and exposition that they can’t possibly escape! Once the reader is stuck, then trap them in a series of MC weak to strong building and ass-kicking of arrogant masters. They will never escape then and will be forced to read the rest of your story. . Originality - 0/5 - It's a cultivation novel. No, wait! It's a System novel. Why not throw in naruto fanfic while you're at it? Oh LOL he was watching Naruto! Close enough. Wait Wait. Let me guess his cultivation system will be based on Dragon Ball? That will be the trifecta of Webnovel fads. Please ascend. Story - 2/5 There is a story. There is. This is not a paper on a system cultivator, is it? Am I reading one endless monologue? I am sure this story would be great if I could get past this wall of text hiding Mount Tai. Characters - 1/5 The characters speak to me. Literally. The MC rarely speak to someone else, unless its a cardboard cut out cliche. Parent, Grandpa. Quite literally named Grandpa trope so the author doesn't have to show anything about him to the reader #shortcut #efficientwriting. The reader will know from all the other copy and paste novels who use Grandpa. Teacher - angry and hates MC. Why? Who cares we need people in authority to be irredeemable illogical antagonists so the hero MC can make them look like fools in a few chapters. Flow - 5/5 The flow is excellent. I enjoyed reading this exposition. The Authors note explaining the yet to be introduced system was perfect. Why let the story show the system. Just tell the reader and yeah Authors note works perfectly. Btw When does the story start?

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