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Astolfo_My_Waifu
Astolfo_My_WaifuLv116yr
2018-06-26 01:15

Friendly advice doesn't matter for my rating i'm a little harsh.First i would like to point out that the story pace is fast ... and because of that the novel is being ruined ... in a normal chinese novel the first 20 chapters would be about 70 chapters ... but the author is either impatient or he is an ******* (i understand no need you will ofc learn stuff from the first release) i would like to say that if the author tried to develop the story at the start not like other retarded novels that in 3 chapters the main characters become broken af ...there was no interaction between the readers and the characters at the start which was pretty confusing in my opinion ... hope the author read this and improves this flaw of his ... nonetheless im really enjoying the story hope you aren't offended by my review :)

Ascension of the Lightning God

Haron
4.2
80 Chs

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Haron
HaronAuthor

I can only say that I'm still learning. :)

6yr
HollowReaver
HollowReaverLv15

If you want I can help you edit past chapters for free since I have a lot of free time this summer👌🏾

Haron:I can only say that I'm still learning. :)
6yr
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Haron
HaronAuthor

The first few chapters are awful, and they really need editing. If you still want to help, I will gladly accept it. You can contact me at haronaotlg@gmail.com :)

HollowReaver:If you want I can help you edit past chapters for free since I have a lot of free time this summer👌🏾
6yr
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Haron
HaronAuthor

Hi, its the author here! If you are reading this, you must be interested in my novel. This is my first time writing a novel, or anything similar to it. And this means there will be mistakes, but I promise to get better, and hopefully, if you stick around you will see it for yourself. I hope you will enjoy reading.

6yr

Kerail
KerailLv12

As there are not a lot of chapters jet I am not certain how it develops. But right now story development does seem promising. The main characters life has not been nice as his clan has mistreated him a lot. At the start of the story he gets chance to change his fate with development AI. And with it it seems MC goes to somewhat similar journey as the cultivation story's here. I get the feeling that the writing style is bit between how western novels and eastern fantasy is written. During reading it shows that authors first language is not English but the story and writing is fluid enough. So the few odd wordings does not shake me out of the reading experience.

6yr
VEGEKU
VEGEKULv6

Well, Hello Everyone This Time I'll be Selfish and rate a perfect 5 Star for the novel. I tied that Until now all of Review that I Wrote would be fair and properly rated that others can't say anything. So What's the reason for this 5 Rate? The Answer is very easy to say. It's because that we as reader didn't treat this novel and its Author Properly till now. Story has a fairy good spelling and Grammar writing and we can easily see that the Author tried in each chapter to be perfectly Ready and good in every way. Character Design also was done pretty good and we see different personalty and characters with their own originality. It's almost like some of the translated novels that we can see proper characters and world background, this is a side the very few of the Original novels have in them. and story progress in a very good way and we can see clearly that compare to first chapters of the novels story is becoming better and better Specially ever since MC entered the Academy. Well System and OP for me is a good thing though now we can see this factors in every Novels so this can't be a problem, in this novel MC although has a System but is a very hardworking one and i have a favorable impression of him. So what is that i'm angry about it ? The novel's Ranking !!??? Why is that this novels with the stable Updated chapters and a rather good story-line has no Ranking? Readers at least try to read the novel to this chapter and after that decide to read it or not. Thanks again Everybody and the Author

6yr
BananaMonkey21
BananaMonkey21Lv5

I like it so I'm giving it a 5 star. The pacing at the start was really fast and there are plenty of grammatical errors, but the author is improving and seems to be trying very hard so I will keep reading.

6yr
King_Xester
King_XesterLv4

One of my first ever reviews but honestly this is a great novel with a somewhat ok amount of character development I've enjoyed it as it is funny in some aspects few minor grammar mistakes so enjoy

5yr
Murderer
MurdererLv4

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6yr
RagnarokWhite
RagnarokWhiteLv12

review ,.................. ............,..................... . . . . . . . . . .. . review.. . . . . . .. . . . . .. . . . .. . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

6yr
SLiasison
SLiasisonLv1

Hi,Haron,how brilliant you are,i am attracted by the first chapter.i am eager to read further more.By the way,i am an editor from Stary.ltd. And I'd like to know if you are interested in releasing or distributing your books on our platform. We'll pay you an advance payment as well as royalty if you'd like to work with us.If you are interested ,do let me know and feel free to ask me anytime you like if you have any questions via this email:yxli94@foxmail.com.i am looking forward to your message.

4yr
Piotr_Uklejewski
Piotr_UklejewskiLv4

******************************* Awesome job! **************************************** *********************** Thanks for the great stories ***********************************

5yr
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