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Kurobell319
Kurobell319Lv26yr
2018-12-29 08:53

Very difficult read. Character creation is a bit rough. Also plot holes make you just go "what just happened?" To top it off with grammatical errors every other sentence. If you can get through all that, then you can finally get to a cliché filled story that is hard to follow. Gave it a good effort. Was too much a struggle for these eyes of mine...

Rebirth: The New Game of Life

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3.8
533 Chs

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BigBootyLover
BigBootyLoverLv5

By chapter 12, MC saves a young master. The young master was wearing a disguise, turns out he is a she. She wakes up, punches MC in face since she is naked on top.... MC explains he saved her life. She thanks him. They end up flirting, hugging, kissing and she says "Be gentle" while MC gives her the meat🍆. Garbage writing like this is what bothers me. Way too forced. Romance was insanely rushed.... MC even has a damn soul bond with a half demon-half celestial wolf puppy by saving the mom Wolf who has a total of 15million HP. More crappy & forced than the most garbage cultivation novel. I had to drop it. Do not bother at all.

6yr

NightingNox
NightingNoxLv4

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6yr
Nawaabzadah
NawaabzadahLv5

Everything sucks as if your first fifty chapters suck than how in the world are you gonna get readers. Writing style sucks, word arrangement sucks, don't know english, don't know how to or whete to use prepositions. Total **** story.

6yr
DragonGodSmith3000
DragonGodSmith3000Lv14

This story has a great start so far the only thing that takes you out of the story is the gender swapping sometimes the mc is male others female also a enchantress is normally associated with women and a enchanter for males please fix that as it makes no sense if that character was a male

7yr
AMiddleFingerToYou
AMiddleFingerToYouLv13

The story started off ok until he was "reborn". It has a lot of inconsistencies. The MC seems know information that wasn't stated prior like people being able to give skills and so on. It honestly just got confusing and felt really rushed at points.

6yr
Byakko22
Byakko22Lv4

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6yr
ChubsC
ChubsCLv11

The story is OKAY, however, every once in a while I start thinking "this is garbage". There was a chapter that talked about how you won't be able to kill a monster if you hit the leg when it's HP is at 1. There was a whole tangent about how this was real life and whatnot...I digress. The main thing that caught me off guard is that he has been in the first woods he landed in for five plus years. You would think he would have figured that out by now. Another aspect is when he gets his class. He was suppose to have been battered by the elements, but reading that chapter I felt the author might have well just given him the class. The first element was fire, it was meant to burn his soul and body and that somewhat portrayed. He just clenched his teeth and withstood it. Thing is, how could he. He was a regular person, before the reincarnation, spent five plus years in the woods to level (by the way only getting to about 15, which is bull...five year and only 15 when the first monster he kills gets him like 9 levels), then you are expected to feel like he's a tough dude. Didn't get that. I mean fire, water, wind, earth, metal, ect. was attacking his soul and body, and you expect me to believe he just clenched his teeth and withstood it from some inner strength? Nah. If you had made it a point in those five year he was in the woods to toughen the MC mentally and physically...then yeah, I'll buy it...but you didn't. And the skills that the wolf passed to him, the heal, purify and the others, I can get how that can happen. I mean the wolf is supposedly bad ass. I can get behind that. Thing is we are never really explained to of how skills get around, how they are passed, conditions, ect. It just seems like anyone can pass skills around like that if they have a technique, which I'm guessing is a no. So, I would have like to have seen more in the shape of an explanation of what skills are, how do you get them, can you get a skill outside you class, can you work towards a skill or do they just use skills books. Also, I get the felling that there is no order...or rather no reason as to why he has done a lot of the things he's done and if there were it's not really well written out. This novel tries to make the MC mysterious, but in the end it fails..with the whole "No Name" alias he uses in the brothel, I get that his status screen doesn't have a name for him, but that alias is just dumb. Overall, this story tires, but fails in my opinion.

5yr
BackendSouls
BackendSoulsLv14

... punches MC in face since she is naked on top.... MC explains he saved her life. She thanks him. They end up flirting, hugging, kissing and she says "Be gentle" ... Seriou...?

5yr
VaishnavC
VaishnavCLv6

Just started. Only read a few chapters . But I am already thinking of dropping it. The grammar is horrible. And from the comments I have seen, the author hasn't hired an editor or done anything to fix this for the last 8 months. For those not bothered by horrible grammar give it a try. For me, it's a deal-breaker.

6yr
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