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Jlax
JlaxLv105yr
2019-10-20 21:29

The grammar is bad and there is little to no flow in the story. The worst part is that it feels messy as f*ck. The protagonist's thoughts are f*cking everywhere and so much unecessary things are going on. The first chapter was trash, the author's comments on the paragraphs just took away any form of immersion from me, not that there was much to begin with. There's an author's note section for crying out loud. All in all, if you like to read something that's of relatively low quality then this novel is for you.

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3PoundsOfRice
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In general no novel on this website is of high quality, none at all, I don't say the novels are bad, some quite entertaining, but almost all of these novels are plagued with cliché errors and forced plots. If you want to read something of quality you can read Martin, Rothfuss or Sanderson, besides this is a fanfiction, ie, this written by a person who writes for pleasure, not out of necessity, so naturally will not make his maximum effort to correct his spelling. Note that you only rated the author with a star, but you forgot that you also rate the frequency of publication of chapters, which is very good, but even so you put a star, is so much the displeasure that you felt that you let your anger lead you to give unfair ratings?

Seud
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Even if you’re updating frequently, it doesn’t matter if what you’re writing is complete sh!t

3PoundsOfRice:In general no novel on this website is of high quality, none at all, I don't say the novels are bad, some quite entertaining, but almost all of these novels are plagued with cliché errors and forced plots. If you want to read something of quality you can read Martin, Rothfuss or Sanderson, besides this is a fanfiction, ie, this written by a person who writes for pleasure, not out of necessity, so naturally will not make his maximum effort to correct his spelling. Note that you only rated the author with a star, but you forgot that you also rate the frequency of publication of chapters, which is very good, but even so you put a star, is so much the displeasure that you felt that you let your anger lead you to give unfair ratings?
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picaco
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Here's the author doing a review of this already finished novel. I started writing this novel as my first time truly writing in English to improve it. The grammar and phrase construction is lacking at first, but as the novel advances, I improved in it, Grammarly was a great help. For the Stability of the updates, I finished writing 256 chapters after 10 months, almost a chapter for day as average. Is already finished so there's nothing much to say. About the story, at first it start with a lax and infantil writing, with a very crude English. The story being written day by day without, always changing what I had thought. This causes some plot holes over the novel that I closed maybe a little forcefully over the novel. What most people complained was about the loss of memory. Yes, there was and in chapter forty-something is explained the why. Read it thinking that he has no memories of the novel after his first ring. People also complained about his style that was control-defense, but why? With a team is a good style, being able to control the team, letting the others finish them. Then as the story advances, entering more the solo player mode, his style changes. Summarizing, I liked to write this story even facing against the hate. It starts a little poor and I am not too proud of it, only considering it as the improvement of the later parts. But, I am proud of the end, really liking how it finished. If you like OP characters that goes facepalming everyone, because it didn't matter anything because they are OP and untouchable, this isn't your novel. He grows stronger than his age, faving greater enemies but always with that might lose.

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