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I can tell it's a great work just from the synopsis. I have loved the others book of the author. Can't wait for this one. Would recommend this to everyone. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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It is a nice story. You wrote it very beautifully considering this is hour first book. I felt it was a little too fast paced. Even though I have no problem in that I think it would be better if they took things slow. Also please stick to one writing style. The one which you have used in later chapters it make you feel that you are reading a script rather than a story. it doesn't set well.I will be looking forward to your work.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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now it looks like a script of a play rather than a novel. just writing the situation in bracked after a colon. It would be much better if it were likeChris couldn't help but be curious about Dhalia's decision of asking Henry. "Why did you asked her Dhalia?" He asked with curiosity. Idk if it is ok...
Yeah..You approach a person whom you just met 2 days ago and try to unbutton his shirt and get close to him without his permission and when he reject you, you are hurt.
Do classmates do that? like just go and try to unbutton the shirt of another person. Let's say that grace used to do that and she was the kind of person who would throw herself at others. but what about Alice?
Umm... I am still not clear about their project