It is a nice story. You wrote it very beautifully considering this is hour first book. I felt it was a little too fast paced. Even though I have no problem in that I think it would be better if they took things slow. Also please stick to one writing style. The one which you have used in later chapters it make you feel that you are reading a script rather than a story. it doesn't set well.I will be looking forward to your work.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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