Reincarnation in (ATG)

For those who have doubts about the name of the MC, they will change the name later in the story.

your mc is basically a slave to his system, he doesn't even have his own will now because everything that happens just on a whim of his system. he calls qingyue a "hypocrite" because she can easily advance in cultivation, knowing she has a cheat code as a catalyst for yunche to become a god. while him has a system that literally has everything he needs.

don't know about the rest, but making the name of the main character of a fanfic the same as the preestablished character in the stories is just not good. I got super confused when knowing that the mc name is jasmine, and this is atg ... where there's should be another jasmine and a pivotal character in the story. and yeah, the mc is a male, confused ... how in the world a man has jasmine as his name? and there's also quite confusing things with the dialogue and the conversation with the system. I don't know, maybe I'm too lazy to try make any sense of it but it's just feel detached. I don't feel any of his interaction is organic.

while not as horrible as a mtl story the writing style is awful with spanish randomly being mixed with English. Even the name of the cultivetion realms and the profound energy that are the basics of an atg fanfic are changed randomly showing lack of editing. Sometimes it is difficult to follow who is speaking and if the mc is having an inner monologue. The name is awful and no matter the reason that according to the author will be explained later on is still does not make sense because it is a female name for a male mc and the fake name use by one of the female lead. The character should be an old man who lived in modern world for 125 years but he chamges from being collected to acting like a child The mc is a slave of the system since after reincarnation he does only what the system asks him even when it is something that he does not won't because otherwhise he got as punishments things like death and the spul tortured in Hades (cit.). If it was not enough with his initial points from the shop of the system could get cheaply the evil god veins but author introduse some lightning sparrow vein that cost way more points that the mc has got and most of all they seem luckluster compared with evil god veins since they only give divine lightning related affinities while with evil god veins mc could get any affinity. SO in my opinion is not something enjoyable to read not even by disconnecting your neurons because there is too much dumb sthick and the mc is pretty much nerfed/over specialized when there is no need to it aside from the author forcing even more the plot to run parellel to the canon plot, even more than already forcing it by having the system prohibiting the mc from killing yun che early on

Thank you for sharing the chapter of your story. I appreciate the opportunity to read it and provide feedback and I enjoyed the content you presented.

The MC is a slave to the system, he is 125y/o but act too immature for his real age. Not 6chapters yet onto the story and he is worse than Yun Che, sleeping with a married woman just for a quest of the system. I’m not going to even mention his chooses on the system shop it’s like he have a pea for brain. I just received damage and NTR flashbacks just reading chapter 6…