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If ITS Impossible how did He do IT then??? thats Bad writing or Bad transalting ...
okay Mate i know you want IT to BE a bit dramatic but Mate.... but in your Story anything IS super dramatic... you need to dile IT down a bit... ITS Not Bad written but ITS way too much
realy good Story so far. i Love to See a good female Charakter. Just one Thing i would Like to Bring. could you do less school/learning/science its realy realy much for a Fantasy novel. maybe do more discription of the drohns or her using her quirk. you also missed realy much opertunities with the "Fights" so far. maybe do a more deep discription of the build Up and Fights in General. especial the Fights in the Tournament you could have done easy more than what you did there... but year you get carried away by discribing math or physics...
Mate ITS realy nice writen... but you are going soooo hard into science Details... i wander some Times If i am Reading a Fantasy Story or a science 101 explanation ON anything you got in your brain at the Moment you wrote this...
you do you dont listen to anyone else
its the Harry Potter Story. author Just inserted two more Charakters and forgot that the Story contains Magic... and there are Chinese supremacie tendenzies... but the english IS top... and ITS No typical AI slurp sooooo....
this IS Harry Potter but they all forget that they are wizards... driving Cars flying by airplane Lifting Things by Hand... i need to ASK did you forget that there is Magic in this Story???
Mate i mean yes modern english food IS realy Not that kreativ but there are realy realy good english dishes... soupe, proige, meats... and you need to think about IT hogwards IS a realy old school they wont Serve modern good food Like German bread or itallian Pizza. and No they wont Serve asian food AS Well becouse Most asian food sucks for the Rest of the world... especial for european wich dont do so spicy...
sorry but the english IS realy realy Bad... for me ITS unreadable...
first. i would say your content IS middle to hight middle but Not good or realy good. ITS Just a Problem with your english... second. you give ppl too much Power If you start commenting in hate speaches... Just ignor and delete them If you dont Like them.