ExeloGard
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so far loving the story, i enjoy calm slow paced novel that focus on the main characters internal thoughts, the conflict they face within themselves and so on. and this novel is doing a pretty good job in that so far. now to the criticism, Just as the sun has it's spots, every rose has its thorns. I'll start with the writing, don't get me wrong, the writing is very good, the style of writing is unique and i love it this way, it focus mainly on one POV, the grammatical error is almost non-existent. but my main problem is that you try to force things. like the conflict within Noah about accepting his new identity, you use the third person "He" to refer to Noah, and then you switch to the First person "I" as a way to show that our main character is having trouble accepting his new identity, and It was repeated in many paragraphs. it's a little bit annoying, but you still a new author, don't take my criticism as hate speech, I'm only saying that because i love the potential this novel have. another thing I don't like, and that is a personal opinion, is the way the Noah is handling his current situation, but i have a feeling it wont last the same very long. HONORABLE MENTIONS: Loreem was an essential part of my speed reading through chapters with her funny GIF s and comments. So far, that's my honest review, Peace✌️