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Review Detail of ExeloGard in The Broken Bonds

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ExeloGard
ExeloGardLv225dExeloGard

so far loving the story, i enjoy calm slow paced novel that focus on the main characters internal thoughts, the conflict they face within themselves and so on. and this novel is doing a pretty good job in that so far. now to the criticism, Just as the sun has it's spots, every rose has its thorns. I'll start with the writing, don't get me wrong, the writing is very good, the style of writing is unique and i love it this way, it focus mainly on one POV, the grammatical error is almost non-existent. but my main problem is that you try to force things. like the conflict within Noah about accepting his new identity, you use the third person "He" to refer to Noah, and then you switch to the First person "I" as a way to show that our main character is having trouble accepting his new identity, and It was repeated in many paragraphs. it's a little bit annoying, but you still a new author, don't take my criticism as hate speech, I'm only saying that because i love the potential this novel have. another thing I don't like, and that is a personal opinion, is the way the Noah is handling his current situation, but i have a feeling it wont last the same very long. HONORABLE MENTIONS: Loreem was an essential part of my speed reading through chapters with her funny GIF s and comments. So far, that's my honest review, Peace✌️

The Broken Bonds

I_K2ut

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I_K2ut
I_K2utAuthorI_K2ut

thank you for your honest review. as a new author i must accept honest criticism, otherwise how am I going to learn anything? I will look at the problems you faced while reading my novel, and I will try to find solutions to improve my writing skill and also how to convey my thoughts to words in the best possible way. And about the personal opinion which you expressed, I won't spoil anything, but your intuition is fairly close to being correct. thank you for showing interest in my novel in its early stage, I'll do my best to improve my writing skills throughout this journey. "I_K2ut"

ExeloGard
ExeloGardLv2ExeloGard

no problem, I'm just being honest

I_K2ut:thank you for your honest review. as a new author i must accept honest criticism, otherwise how am I going to learn anything? I will look at the problems you faced while reading my novel, and I will try to find solutions to improve my writing skill and also how to convey my thoughts to words in the best possible way. And about the personal opinion which you expressed, I won't spoil anything, but your intuition is fairly close to being correct. thank you for showing interest in my novel in its early stage, I'll do my best to improve my writing skills throughout this journey. "I_K2ut"
Loreem
LoreemLv2Loreem

Thanks for the mention, Exelogard, this is just my way for supporting this novel. glad you enjoy my thoughts throughout the chapters.