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cosmicslime

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Novice Author. Other username - FIAMMA01

2023-11-18 JoinedUnited States
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime3mth
    Replied to usfyy

    Close.

    Ch 10 Step By Step
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    Null Reincarnation - Return Of The Fourth Primordial
    Fantasy · cosmicslime
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime4mth
    Replied to Romance_guy

    That's still being decided..........

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    Null Reincarnation - Return Of The Fourth Primordial
    Fantasy · cosmicslime
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    The premise here is interesting and the set up around peter and the whole academy is decently being built up. The standout point here is how they actually seem like relatable 13 year olds.

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    Heatherland.
    Eastern · GMS Jakers
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Commented

    Italics would be good for these.

    Alone.
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    Heatherland.
    Eastern · GMS Jakers
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    The premise of the story isn't really clear for the first few sections, but the narrative clues were engaging enough to grab attention. Also when voicing the MC's inner thoughts, try spacing them out so they don't get jumbled in with other paragraphs. Like this: (Where am I?") Instead of: There was no one there.(Where am I?) He slowly rose from the bed.

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    Grave borne Revenant
    Fantasy · Alan_Grimlord
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Commented

    "Nothing came to mind'

    ….he tried to think back to what he used to look like, but nothing came to thought; he was still panicked; he had tall black hair with a pair of turquoise eyes; his skin color was light-toned.
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    Grave borne Revenant
    Fantasy · Alan_Grimlord
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    This feels like a self discovery novel, and from what I've read so far it comes off pretty well, the thoughts of the main character were clearly being conveyed but, unless I' missing something the MC's name was missing for a good bit. With some clarity in the dialogue, this should get better.

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    Musical Saint
    Fantasy · BigSeb
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    A good romance novel. Although the entire matrimony part starts it off a little strong, there was some genuine buildup here and it feels like the wider world is just waiting to be explored. As long as you watch the pacing this will only continue to get better.

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    And a new dawn to thou i've loved before
    Teen · Theothecolossal
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Replied to Alan_Grimlord

    Yes explanations will come later down the line.

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    Null Reincarnation - Return Of The Fourth Primordial
    Fantasy · cosmicslime
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Replied to SoulNexus

    Sure, whats your series called?

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    Null Reincarnation - Return Of The Fourth Primordial
    Fantasy · cosmicslime
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    Added to library. This was actually a really good read, the main character rumi is pretty funny and her reaction to the decisions she made three years ago is played out pretty well, especially the part about this nearly being a slice of life story. Keep it up!

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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    This starts off really, really strong. The very first monologue sounded like it took a lot of time and effort to come up with and the protagonist seems like he'd be the perfect fit for that line of thought. Chapter 1 goes from 0 to 100 really fast so that alone should be more than enough to attract readers. Keep it up!

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    THE FOOL
    Urban · MelvinDash
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Replied to MelvinDash

    Trying to make it daily.

    Ch 13 Prep And Practice
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    Null Reincarnation - Return Of The Fourth Primordial
    Fantasy · cosmicslime
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    Added to Library. Its a really good book, and aside from the very few grammatical errors here and there, the story starts off strong. The characters seem a bit mysterious and the overall premise is very unique, only the wider world needs more exploration now.

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    Hunters of the Dark Ages.
    Fantasy · XenaReigns_1
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Commented

    "Maniacal"

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    Hunters of the Dark Ages.
    Fantasy · XenaReigns_1
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Commented

    Say should be "sorry".

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    Hunters of the Dark Ages.
    Fantasy · XenaReigns_1
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    Amazing story. The opening chapter lays the foundation for the world of Eldoria and the story as a whole. The whole dialogue about Night and chaos, and how the very universe came to be was really captivating, and to top it off the characters themselvs were a standout, Theo, leo, Aria and Caleb. They give the story a quaint vybe for the setting and are comelling enough to retain interest.

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    Mystery of the Whispering Grove
    Fantasy · MonicaLsk
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    The story starts off strong and the characters seem very engaging. The only thing is, it will be hard for readers to remember the specifics of the classes and skills, meaning they'll have to go back to he auxiliary volume to remember certain things.

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    Eclipse of Eternity: A Duel of Gods
    Fantasy · Mask_Xd
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    Reviewing at chapter 34: The atmosphere of this story is captured pretty well, the details about the souls screaming in agony and the hollow darkness that surrounded them was something that was actually engaging. The main issue I have is remembering who's who here....like the names Titan 5, Titan 6 and Titan 7 don't exactly stand out.

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    Atonement's Path
    Fantasy · FriedrichFriedrice
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  • cosmicslime
    cosmicslime5mth
    Posted

    The story feels captivating enough, the opening chapters are marked with intrigue and make you feel a part of the world. The characters are a strong point too and in the first sections it’s good that you get to see the world from their perspective. Also the descriptive writing, it really sets the fantasy tone and paints the story in your mind.

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    [BL] The Fake Prince of Besirique: Rise of the Regent
    LGBT+ · Goosey_Goo
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