Maxbonzo
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of course the story isn't gonna develop much in the 8 chapters you read lol. I mean for character design I don't know what to tell you, it's the same as the original stories. As for sucking at everything I mean he's a pretty realistic strength for this point in the story, he's not beating a Nomu or Shigaraki at USJ. I agree Sasuke in the Narutoverse beats him though, I mean MHA is just a weaker verse in comparison. Sasukes personality is the same if not slightly toned down though. Maybe you could further elaborate on your thoughts cause some of what you say seems strange to me.
oh my bad, pretty sure the translations I read called her a he early on.
always bet on Kirishima
In regards to AFO, I mean you could apply this to anything really. Like why did he give up after fIling to get Aizawas quirk one time? Could have tried again, but if he does then there's no story cause he just wins before chapter 1. I mean yeah I could have him just kill everyone's family and everyone in UA when they're home but like, why? AFO isnt Shigaraki anyway he cares more about control than chaos and can get to Sasuke a hundred different ways. Just because something makes sense in theory doesnt mean it would be the most enjoyable thing for people to read. The second quirk plot will be slow burn, but its still happening. And for his darkness, I mean I didnt wanna copy the same character development he goes through in Naruto, but he'll always be vengeful. I could potentially incorperate that scaring students from being heroes plot its kind of interesting, but only for like 1 or 2 students not the whole class. For feeling like a aide character I mean bro... It hasnt even been 20 chapters give it time man lol, by this point in the main story Midoriya only inherited OFA, fought stain, and helped save All Might at USJ. I've had Sasuke boost Midoriya, help at USJ, and help force high level villains into hiding, messing with thier drug rings. Thanks for the input overall, if you have anything else to say I'll be happy to read and reply.
Thank you for the review. for Sasuke being edgy I mean... it's Sasuke Uchiha bro, that's his character. He will tone down some eventually though.you're right that I should probably try to integrate some other characters though, suggestions on how are always welcome. It's just that most characters are just irrelevant and don't serve much of any purpose to the overall plot of the story, so I was mostly including the relevant ones. I don't many people want to or care about me giving time to shine for guys like Sero and stuff
well it's his whole motivation people know about
I've never read other mha stories that did this, sorry. I was just trying to avoid plot holes. although yeah I could have made this portion more entertaining looking back. another reason I did it was to show that Sasukes quirk isn't purely physical due to how he could kinda break out. thank you for the criticism though it helps me be better
It's a split second decision she has no experience in. All that was on her mind was that he's about to jump out there and get himself killed which she wanted to prevent. She probably didn't think it would knock him out but either way he can easily be carried
Agreed, honestly Kota could be like Shino from Naruto
Come on now the vibrant flashbacks transitions are cooooool. He's pretty normal besides using r9k
Broooo lol it's a flashback😭
Uh huh no. He might get one in the future but no sword right now. Do you think a sword would be a good idea?
Kota will serve a purpose in this story. and while Sugar guy is stronger I just don't think he's ever been as relevant to the story.