Kat_Mabis

Totally understand. As a writer, I totally get where you're coming from. My advice: just keep doing you😉

The story is very slow at the beginning, and there's a lot of information thrown to the reader all at once. I also took note of quite a few grammar mistakes and weird wording as I read the first few chapters. However, the story does seem interesting. I like how you explain the different worlds throughout the chapters so that the reader can understand the story's settings and world development. Just try to avoid repeating information though. I believe that by fixing the errors, this story can be transformed into a masterpiece. As you said, humans are the jacks of all trades.

I like the story so far. The characters are well portrayed in the story, and the storyline keeps you at the edge of your seats. I praise the author for having good writing skills. However, I would like to advise the author to be careful of how you use exclamation marks when a character speaks. For example, when a character says, "I love it!", you can't say that they said those words 'calmly'. When there is an exclamation mark, it's to show that someone is exclaiming, crying or shouting words. I noticed that when Logan speaks. But that's a minor issue. Overall, the story is good and I would recommend it to others. Keep it up, author 😉

I like the story line a lot. The main characters, Kate and Lina, are described and portrayed very well through the chapters. However, there are a few awkward phrases that don't make sense, such as "If something interesting does happen that not always a good thing as that means something should not be happening is. Like an accident or someone getting hurt in some way, shape, or form." The synopsis gave too much of the story away for me, to be honest. After I read the synopsis, I already knew what was going to happen in the first few chapters, so it wasn't as intriguing as it was meant to be. Also, the grammar could use a bit of work, but that is something that can be easily fixed. Overall, the story is good. With a bit of improvement, this story can be turned into a masterpiece. Keep it up, author👍

I love the story❤️ the vivid imagery and the manner in which the author allows the reader to see the ruined place through the eyes of the main character is amazing. We also kinda get to understand how the main character feels through chapter 1, especially under the cold rain and in the dark atmosphere of the town. I felt a chill run up my spine🥶 The writing of this story is beautiful. I like the descriptions a lot. The author has done a great job. Keep it up, author 😉

This is such a cute story. The book cover compliments it so well. This story is one of the unique stories I've read on Webnovel. It's very fresh and makes the reader want to read more. The story line is interesting, and the protagonist has a flawed and relatable background. I can't wait to read further. Keep up the good work, author!

The story is very confusing at the beginning. It switches betweens scenes too quickly for me. There are also a few spelling and grammar mistakes, leading to some sentences not making sense. However, the story does get interesting as the reader reads further. The characters are described pretty well, and the relationship with Natalia and Edmund is sweet. I believe that with practice, the author is capable of shaping this story into a masterpiece.

The concept of the story is very new to me, which is what I love about it. I love how the story begins, allowing the reader to dive right into the story and sail through the creativity crafted by the author. The author did a great job with the character design, and the story line is very fresh. I can't wait to read more. Keep it up, author!

The prologue is lovely. It allows the reader to settle nicely into the story. The writing quality of the story is excellent, and the characters are described in crafted detail (totally love that!). I'm not a big fan of fantasy and action novels, but this is a story I would definitely recommend to those who are. Keep it up, author!