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Decima993mthReplied to Khun_Aug3r0_Agnisbro, I have been reading fanfictions since last six years that's why I have built up a standard. These dialogues are cringy to me because I have read so many similarly cheesy dialogues.
They maintain eye contact for a while and just smiled at each other. While still looking at each other Peter breaks the silence "We're going to be great friends aren't we"Â- Decima994mthCommented
The dialogues are cringe af. I physically shuddered reading this.
They maintain eye contact for a while and just smiled at each other. While still looking at each other Peter breaks the silence "We're going to be great friends aren't we"Â - Decima994mthCommented
Why was mc struggling so much against selmy. He should have used his superhuman strength and speed more efficiently rather than engaging in swordplay in which he is clearly at a disadvantage in terms of skill. Honestly he should have backhanded the sword and punched selmy as soon as his iceblade was countered.
Ch 63 A Bold Duel #63 - Decima995mthCommented
I find it hard to believe that the guard isn't a slightest bit suspicious that a man knows who the night watch is but claims to forget his own name.It's not very well thought out author.
The rider stared at him for a moment, his expression a blend of suspicion and curiosity. He sighed, his grip on the sword's hilt loosening slightly. "Strangely enough... I don't detect lies in your words," he admitted, though his blade remained aimed at the young man. - Decima999mthCommented
So far the story is intriguing, but a couple of things bother me personally. First MCs name, it's like a child google searched for cool names in Greek, but I can live it with since it's not as important to the story. Second, why has the author addressed mc by white haired youth/ youth/ amnesiac etc. so often instead of usual he/him or name. Addressing a character by his characteristics is done rarely usually when pronoun or name is used repeatedly to give variety to writing. It shouldn't be used every time. It's making me cringe a bit. Anyways that's just my opinion. Keep up the good work author.
Ch 2 Bike Theft - Decima991yrReplied to Kurotora
Are you thinking of movies when you picture Ollivander's shop? He said clearly in book one that "Every Ollivander wand has a core of a powerful magical substance, Mr. Potter. We use unicorn hairs, phoenix tail feathers, and the heartstrings of dragons." We says we use means previous Ollivanders also not I use.
- Decima991yrReplied to Inklike
I didn't know you can get a wand from Wizardingworld. com until this comment.
(AN- Please understand that this is one of those snap decisions that MC took. Put yourself in MC's shoes, would you not follow them because of slight danger.) - Decima991yrCommentedCh 1024 Chapter 1023
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Random Omnipotent Being
'Is this time travel?, Why am in London in a 11 year old's body?, this feels like a situation from one of those reincarnation/ transmigration fanfictions. Am I in another world or same world but at different time?, Who sent me here?, I don't remember meeting an ROB making any wishes and other stuff that usually happens in novels.' - Decima991yrReplied to EienofEden
They could have brought a healer home.
'Well that explains why Harry didn't have to go to St. Mungo's, he was already treated in his childhood, there goes some of the fans' conspiracy theories, where Dumbledore didn't want Harry to get treatment from St. Mungo's to keep him weak' I thought as I finished my Ice-Cream. - Decima991yrCommentedCh 1018 Chapter 1017
- Decima991yrReplied to Midnite_knightCh 1016 Chapter 1015