An_Average_Author
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An_Average_Author4mthReplied to Theoneandonly_RinThank you much!
The ripples, like graceful dancers, pirouetted through the tender breeze to the enchanting melody of the wind's orchestra until they reached an unsuspecting child, curiously peaking through the slightly ajar window—the crumbling window struggling to hold the child's weight.- An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Amera_Mee
- An_Average_Author1yrPosted
I like my novel. What can I say? I know this premise might seem cliché, but give me and my novel a chance. I'll definitely prove you wrong! If you like the chapters, make sure to add Ant Society to your Library and write a review so I know what to work on! Chapters will be anywhere from 2,000-5,000 words.
- An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_SomethingCh 3 Author's note
- An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_Something
I'll get to Gray’s backstory later in the story
I started hyperventilating as my body felt like it was getting degloved piece by piece while my ex-wife, full of malice, was slowly stabbing and teasing my open wounds full of tender nerves and muscle with a blazing knife, making my blood boil—and in the process, scalding all my internal organs. The pain was too much, and my screams became that of a boar squealing with agony as it was getting poached, and all I could do was stay there, stay in the void, restrained and helpless. As I violently grasped my head with all my might, digging my fingers through my skin and directly into my skull, trying to make the pain disappear, I passed out and drifted back into the "void." The "void," the comfort I wanted to salvage. The haven I wanted to keep... - An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_Something
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"I have devised a plan, and with MY plan, I'm sure we can bite those elusive bastards by their buttocks! MY plan is quite simple," The Queen kept emphasizing the "My" in her speech. It made me think otherwise about "her plan." - An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_Something
Il'll leave it to your imagination
"you're one lucky sonuvabitch!" The Queen seemed mad at Valarie's decision and wouldn't stop telling me how lucky I was to be alive and how now she would have to deal with her father. There was one thing I thought at this moment: This bitch does not stop complaining! - An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_Something
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I guess getting hit by that truck and all the pain I endured wasn't so serendipitous after all. After pondering the situation, I shriveled up into a ball full of depression, and as the minutes passed, my already low self-esteem got even lower. - An_Average_Author1yrReplied to Flower_SomethingCh 3 Author's note
- An_Average_Author1yrPosted
I like it! I like the vibe this novel encompasses with its descriptive storytelling and the characters that feel like real people. The descriptions are not too many nor too few; it's just right. The characters' dialogue feels natural, and like I'm in the conversation too. But every good thing has its cons- 1. A lot of grammatical and punctuation errors 2. Some things come abrupt 3. Dialogue is a bitt wacky at times. (doesn't take away from the story). Overall, you should give it a read!
- An_Average_Author1yrReplied to AIRA_
- An_Average_Author1yrPosted
I love the plot. I have never seen a boxing novel or any piece of media like it. The writing is decent. I would recommend more descriptive paragraphs and concise dialogue. I also recommend not throwing the characters' appearance in an awkward spot. For example, when Brett gets introduced, his appearance doesn't flow well with the paragraph. Overall it has an exciting plot and good writing style, and if you're looking for a sports novel, check this out! Good job, author!
- An_Average_Author1yrCommented
Sounds like my room. “Fortress of filth”
After turning off the annoying device he emerged from his fortress of filth and walked towards the bathroom without bothering to open the curtains. As he glared at the mirror a youth with tanned skin, jet black straight shoulder-length hair, sunken cheeks, and scarlet eyes returned the scowl right back at him. - An_Average_Author1yrPosted
5 out of 5! Wonderful Job! It’s a shame how well-written novela like this, are overshadowed by the same cultivation bulllshit. The characters feel alive with their well-written dialogue and personalities. The writing style is simple but detailed enough to where your mind is not jumbled, and the scenes come to life like a stoo motion movie. The wondeful use of literary devices help bring the story to life. Each detail sucos you in, and by the end, it gives you an insatiable desire for more. Well, done Author!
- An_Average_Author1yrCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3 - Angel of Fire
- An_Average_Author1yrCommentedCh 1 Chapter 1 - Sadness Anew
- An_Average_Author1yrReplied to AceAmbrosia