Rya_kishou
Im a college student and artist. I mainly draw but for my goal to create my own manga I write down my Story in Form of a novel first. it is mainly based on irl Events mixed Together with fantasy
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it's the name of my actual cat haha :")
xiaogua so wholesome T_T soft boy
Omg a thousand years...poor baby T_T
I really love these kinda stories, ig it's the reason why I keep up with who made me a princess and similar novels. I like the Protagonist alot and from the first chapter I got the impression that the guy friend she talked to in school is the author of the novel she read. He seems like a nice dude ,I wonder if he gets reincarnated into the prince 🤔 overall story and flow go smooth and well and I enjoyed reading it so far. I can empathize with the MC alot. I hope she gets the happiness she deserves. I will continue reading!♡ Hopefully author-nim would want to fellowly support each other 🥺💕 keep doing ♡
good luck with contest! I got no PS on me atm as I currently already voted on another persons work x.x But good luck! ♡
It's definitely a different kind of zombie story. I like the idea and the characters were interesting too. I was a little disappointed that MC got beat up for 3 days at the beginning by his comrades...it gave this typical ' MC is being bullied and later in the plot gains everyones trust and respect ' trope. Not saying It's bad, just thought it was a shame that these Teens couldn't befriend each other, given the situation but hey I guess Teens will be Teens. Something that did bother me a little was the grammar, while spelling was all fine, the grammar lacked a bit. Often the author repeated himself in the same sentence to explain the same Action, it's nothing bad, it just Interrupts the reading slow a little. In the end it's nothing to get too upset about, as the plot and Story was still understandable and easy to comprehend. Will continue reading to see how it's going. Overall a rating of 4.6 isn't bad imo.
Hey, Author here! I humbly thank each one of you for reading ◇Dark Souls◇! It's been a dream project of mine for quite a few years. I started coming up with the story back in high school and gradually developed it inside my head over the years. Since I plan to adapt this novel into a manga in the future, my writing style obviously doesn't go into the book style direction but more into the webnovel style. I hope you won't mind it too much. I'm an absolute beginner writer, I have seriously never written anything before and tbh I was scared to start this at first, but we all gotta jump into the cold water sometimes right?! Well anyways, I'm greatful for everyone's Feedback so far! I tried to adapt it into my novel and I hope the improvement shows. Thanks to my Editor ,I got a better understanding of Word building and grammar ,which helped me implement Story aspects better. Thanks to him the grammar also gradually improved! I've edited the first 3 chapters which were not grammar checked yet and also added some things here and there, to fit the rest of the story better. Thanks to everyones feedback so far I had a good chance on learning and I'm greatful for that so thank you everyone!♡ Now if you've read this novel and enjoyed the story ,please leave a Review and lmk what you think! It would be my pleasure to hear about your thoughts ! now have a cookie and see you again! 💕👀 *gibs cookie*
I recommend downloading a spell checking App, it already helps alot in identifying basic spelling /grammar mistakes, for the perfect polishing maybe look for an Editor or an online friend who is a native speaker in English, to help you grammar check. English is only my third language and while I'm already pretty good at it I still make quite a few mistakes, so I have an Editor looking over my chapters before release. If I had the time I would help you correct your chapters ,but im actually a really busy person irl so I'm sorry I can't. Again Tldr; spellchecking app like Word or an Editor or both. Good luck!>~<
I read the first 3 chapters of it and while the story progressed at a good pace and the Logic behind it was okay, the writing itself wasn't that good. I had a hard time following sometimes and it was clear the authors first language isn't english. I recommend getting an Editor as it would help alot in improving the writing quality. For Character Design I think they were okay. Could have been described more what they looked like and also polish their personalities more. Overall I think this book is decent, it got air for improvement but with an Editor it should do much better. Otherwise the plot was nice imo.
Ren is Reveries nickname♡