most mc's are orphans, so that the author doesn't have to waste time with their interaction, if they're not important in the story. Also about making it hard for the mc, it wouldn't be a fun story without conflict or would you read a story where the mc already has everything?

Yeah I started this series without much planning, so because it's my first time writing a fanfiction I did a couple of mistakes, including how powerful he can be, so I have to somehow correct that by nerfing him. However I'm 99% sure he can only use sage mode for a couple seconds. If you know any moment where he used it more then that, you could tell me and I could check it out✌🏻

Just because he wants the metal doesn't mean he can only do that. Imagine you get into the world of marvel, wouldn't you want to experience different things and adventures? It's not like metal will run away or something, he can still get it afterwards. He has about a decade before Thanos arrives so he doesn't have to rush everything. Hope that clears it up!👍🏻

It isn't filler. It's just a sub-plot insetad of "He went to the Savage Lands, got metal and then left." I want to give my story more depth and I can achieve that by letting things happen at different places with different people. Hope you understand now!👍🏻

Qell a little backstory is important, so that the strenght of the character he will be fighting somewhat makes sense but worry not! There will soon be a longer fight!

I like that he's weak at the start but he is extremely idiotic or has no willpower at all. He wants to commit suicide because he couldn't become strong in 1 month? If he trained enough, he could become strong enough to split mountains but just because he didn't get strong enough to beat Tom in 1 month he wants to kill himself? Especially in a world where you can go from 'extremely weak' to atleast 'alright' in months(Coby). Extremely weak-willed MC in my opinion.🤨

Well, I'll think about it. Those are really good suggestions and since I want to use some characters, that are less talked about, I'll do some research and decide then. Thank you for your suggestion!

Adonis is a handsome greek god and saying "I look like a young adonis" basically just means that he is very handsome.

No this is based on the MCU but has some differences to it. It's basically my own Marvel Universe but based on the MCU.

Where did you get the boss/subordinate relationship from? I wrote it more like a partnership, don't know how you saw it as him being the subordinate. Also SHIELD's help isn't something you decline just because you're rich. SHIELD has ressources he can use, like intelligence or technology. Just because a character is rich doesn't make him able to handle anything alone. Even Batman needs Alfred, Lucius Fox, Justice League, his sidekicks,..., to just survive sometimes.

You're saying my whole novel is bad and I should stop writing because of 1 paragraph that you don't even understand? The paragraph will make sense because it will be explained LATER, so you can't even understand it YET. Just because you don't understand something doesn't make it bad🤦🏻‍♂️

I have not even read this "mtl" and everything I wrote is written by myself without any help or copying others so NO! I have not "copy and pasted" from anything!

*Minor Spoiler* Well I have something similair already planned. Not the exact thing you said but it goes into that direction. Also I didn't "write myself in to a corner" I have a specific plan but for that to work, I need to make some events happen first that aren't going to make sense for now. Still, thank you for the advice.

I already told multiple times that the MC will only get the abilites of the persons but kurama is a whole new being that's just sealed inside of him. Therefore, there will be no tailed beasts or any of the related abilities like bijuu-dama.

you know, that's actually the reason it's called "fiction" instead of "realistic world where there are suprisingly superheros?"

how exactly am I supposed to do world building to an already build world?

Yes but there weren't really much combat seals shown from him. Or if they were, they mostly needed multiple people or costs something, like your soul. Of course he probably has a lot of them off-screen but I only use abilities actually shown or described.

Hmm yeah you have some good points, I could've described his backstory a little better but I already said, he couldn't get out of that life because of the debt his father left him. You can't really start a company or anything like that, without having atleast a little money, which he didn't have because of the debt. What I also hinted at, was that the debt collectors forced him to work for the mafia, to pay his debt. I see my mistake, that I didn't explain it good enough, so yeah that was a little bad written.

The MC is trying to build a cooperative relationship with fury, while your talking like they're some kind of enemies. Sure Fury is a very paranoid person, who likes to be in control but he would rather "use" the MC instead of antagonizing him. Also all the arguments are using, are the exact reason why Fury wouldn't do something against him, even with some knowledge about his abilities. The MC also said, that he will gain more abilities, so Fury can't even think of a contingency plan. Under these circumstances, Fury would rather go into a cooperative relationship and "use" him instead of trying something against him.

Where did I ever mention, him getting training from her??